Page 1 of 2
Autumn in the South
Posted: Tue Apr 10, 2012 2:51 pm
by Dennis N O'Brien
Hello, I'm new to this forum so hope the following poem conforms:
Autumn in the South
In April when the first cool days
Foretell of winter’s coming frost,
And waning sun’s soft golden rays
Shine weaker now that summer’s lost;
When morning mists in veils of grey
The trees along the river cloak,
Until the breezes blow away
The clinging mist like clouds of smoke.
Then under skies of palest blue,
In these clear days before the cold
The trees that shed their gowns bestrew
The fading green with flecks of gold.
© Dennis N. O'Brien, 2011, 2012.
Re: Autumn in the South
Posted: Tue Apr 10, 2012 4:09 pm
by Maureen K Clifford
Oh I reckon we can live with it Dennis
Welcome to the site, lovely to have you on board and we look forward to sharing more of your descriptive writings.
You'll do.
Cheers
Maureen
Re: Autumn in the South
Posted: Tue Apr 10, 2012 4:11 pm
by Robyn
Great work Dennis, very evocative.
Robyn
Re: Autumn in the South
Posted: Tue Apr 10, 2012 4:13 pm
by Heather
Lovely Dennis. It's a beautiful time of the year and you have captured it.
Welcome to the forum!
Heather
Re: Autumn in the South
Posted: Tue Apr 10, 2012 4:21 pm
by Neville Briggs
Good on you Dennis. Don't worry too much about conforming.
Re: Autumn in the South
Posted: Tue Apr 10, 2012 4:23 pm
by Heather
Dennis don't you listen to Neville, he'll have you put in the naughty corner real quick!
Heather
Re: Autumn in the South
Posted: Tue Apr 10, 2012 5:56 pm
by Bob Pacey
Can i come out if Dennis is coming in ?????
Welcome mate good start and on the right track.
Bob
Re: Autumn in the South
Posted: Tue Apr 10, 2012 6:35 pm
by Dennis N O'Brien
Thanks to all above for the friendly welcome, I'll be posting a few more over the next little while so I'd better vet them to make sure I don't finish up in that "naughty corner".
Re: Autumn in the South
Posted: Tue Apr 10, 2012 7:53 pm
by Glenny Palmer
...
G'daay Dennis & welcome!
That's a lovely piece mate. BTW you have to try pretty hard to get elevated into the naughty corner...just ask Bobbity...
Cheeers
Glenny Palmer
Re: Autumn in the South
Posted: Wed Apr 11, 2012 5:25 pm
by Neville Briggs
Despite what Heather says , Dennis, you won't end up in the naughty corner if you listen to me..trust me..I know what I'm doing