ABPA - Australian Bush Poets Association

Oh Marty - that is powerful writing - stark, harsh, tender,poignant. Well done. Inspired piece of work I reckon

I like the set out - it is very different but gee it works well mate.


Cheers

Maureen.

I agree with Maureen, very powerful. The scene comes through loud and clear, with well-paced emotion.
Robyn

That's good Marty. I don't think that it is disjointed, I'm not sure what that would mean, for me the experience you are depicting would be confused and dislocating, so I think that the style suits the mood. The interrupting "shouts" are a good touch I think, that makes it into a sort of stage drama, which I think is what this sort of poetry is about.

That's a powerful poem Marty.

Heather