Home work : Sonnet 'The Shy Suitor'

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Terry
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Home work : Sonnet 'The Shy Suitor'

Post by Terry » Thu Sep 16, 2021 6:26 pm

A simple old fashioned rhyming sonnet – as usual a bit rushed
All lines Capitalized, and there is no punctuation.



SONNET – The Shy Suitor

The golden flush of dawn awaits the day
With promise in the many gifts it gives
To brighten lover’s hearts along the way
Then smile upon the town where Annette lives.

He feels its early warmth upon his back
And hears the distant birds who sing with joy
Along the tree lined winding old bush track
To serenade a smitten farmers boy.

But will she notice him as he goes past
Or is her heart already spoken for
Or is she only waiting to be asked
By him now as he passes by her door.

Will he as usual once more pass on by
Or will he find new courage, not be shy?

© T.E. Piggott

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Re: Home work : Sonnet 'The Shy Suitor'

Post by Catherine Lee » Thu Sep 16, 2021 6:36 pm

Delightful, Terry. I am really there as I read this, and it has a lovely feel to it.

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Re: Home work : Sonnet 'The Shy Suitor'

Post by Terry » Thu Sep 16, 2021 10:59 pm

Thanks Catherine

I tried to to write it in the old romantic rhyming style,
using the 8 - 6 formula.
Not sure if I even got close but it was fun trying.

Another great idea of yours Maureen.

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Re: Home work : Sonnet 'The Shy Suitor'

Post by Ron » Fri Sep 17, 2021 10:06 am

Good one Terry, I know of a few blokes who would fit the picture you have painted, I can certainly relate to it.
Brings a wry smile, a bit like the poem "A Bush Proposal" (by C.H. Winter) does. (Gary put it up on one of his posts a while back.)
Well done mate, enjoyed it.
Ron.

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Re: Home work : Sonnet 'The Shy Suitor'

Post by Terry » Fri Sep 17, 2021 11:41 am

Thanks Ron

I wonder where they come from at times.

Cheers Terry

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Re: Home work : Sonnet 'The Shy Suitor'

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Fri Sep 17, 2021 3:11 pm

Doesn't matter where they come from - when they are this good just keep them coming. Loving the romantic touch in this one. Nicely done Terry
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Re: Home work : Sonnet 'The Shy Suitor'

Post by Terry » Fri Sep 17, 2021 6:57 pm

Thanks Maureen

It's only the second one I've done of these as well - last one was years ago.

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Re: Home work : Sonnet 'The Shy Suitor'

Post by Shelley Hansen » Sat Sep 18, 2021 6:25 pm

Well crafted, Terry! Be careful, once you start writing sonnets they will cast their spell over you and you will be smitten with this beautiful genre, as I am!! ;)

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Re: Home work : Sonnet 'The Shy Suitor'

Post by Terry » Sat Sep 18, 2021 9:19 pm

I can well believe that Shelley,

I've been tiring for some time of the longer version we generally write.
In fact I've written very few in the last couple of years - although I have made a bit of an effort of late.
And that's it,It has become an effort just to get to the end of them.

So I can see the possibilities with these - learning the skill of saying all that needs to be said, in a just few words.

Might be what I need to get the juices flowing again?

Terry

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Re: Home work : Sonnet 'The Shy Suitor'

Post by Terry » Wed Sep 29, 2021 12:06 pm

You could be right Shelley

I've written another and have ideas for a third.
But the next set of prompts will probably get me back on track.

Cheers

Terry

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