Homework 9/4/22 'Visor Dawning'

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Homework 9/4/22 'Visor Dawning'

Post by Ron » Sat Apr 09, 2022 10:18 am

Visor Dawning.
©Ron Boughton. April 2022

Contentment in perception of forever changing scene
In Broken Hill’s kaleidoscope of colours to be seen,
In landscapes of the spectrum that sustain the artist’s brush,
Where matters not if arid, or in times when could be lush!
The blue bush and the saltbush and the striking desert pea
Are only some components of the beauty there to see,
And Mundi Mundi’s views! To be remembered in memoirs!
And where at night the smallest glance …could see Ten Thousand stars!

At first my helmets visor was my window to this world!
When cerulean skies, on steroids, were at times unfurled,
As many years we’d ridden, to the ‘Hill’ and far beyond
A group of mates with common thread, who of this place were fond,
Where each year could reveal, pleasant horizons of surprise,
There often heightened by, vivid pink and orange sunrise!
A changing world of variables, that to understand
Gave deep appreciation for the fortune of this land!

We’d seen Menindee’s big lake, a brimmer, to befuddle!
Because! A year before was just …a piddle of a puddle!
And good years saw wildflowers in proliferation grow
But drought years showed just stubble, and much road-kill for the crow!
Another year a dust storm from Wilcannia to Cobar
That riding through, showcased a setting surreal and bizarre!
A swirling red dust tunnel, for Two Hundred Ks. we rode,
Where rooster-tails of fine red mist, were thrown up from the road!

So many splendid vistas viewed, now time to reminisce,
And lucky, to have touched the soul of magic outback bliss!
Along with many escapades, in our land so diverse
Like riding the Great Ocean Road in weather quite adverse,
Where, Twelve apostles could, as shattered skeletons appear!
And Snowy Mountains rides, what a great memory souvenir!
Where misty veils of morning would rise slowly from the snow,
Belonging in the treasure chest …of biking years ago!

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Re: Homework 9/4/22 'Visor Dawning'

Post by Terry » Sat Apr 09, 2022 11:01 am

Hi Ron

Very descriptive and you made excellent use of the prompts.
I enjoyed the views encountered on your ride - or should I say rides.
There's beauty everywhere if we care to take the time to look,
and even in the harsh times there's a view that's worth seeing,
for that's often, when you see the real Australia.

Enjoyed the poem Ron

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Re: Homework 9/4/22 'Visor Dawning'

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Sun Apr 10, 2022 11:16 am

WOW! You made great use of the prompts in your journey - nicely crafted .
A piddle of a puddle
Love that :lol:

Well done - I enjoyed the ride
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Re: Homework 9/4/22 'Visor Dawning'

Post by Ron » Sun Apr 10, 2022 11:20 am

Thanks Terry,
You are spot on I reckon with your comment: There's beauty everywhere if we care to take the time to look,
and even in the harsh times there's a view that's worth seeing,
Says it all mate.
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Re: Homework 9/4/22 'Visor Dawning'

Post by Ron » Sun Apr 10, 2022 11:30 am

Thanks Maureen,
Yes it was like Two different worlds in that Twelve months, went from just a 'piddle' in a drought scene to there being water as far as the eye could see.
Pleased you enjoyed 'the ride'! :D
Ron.

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Re: Homework 9/4/22 'Visor Dawning'

Post by Shelley Hansen » Tue Apr 12, 2022 1:10 pm

I can really relate to these sentiments, Ron! Definitely a land of exquisite beauty all around us.

I love the "piddly puddle" too!! :D

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Re: Homework 9/4/22 'Visor Dawning'

Post by Ron » Thu Apr 14, 2022 2:34 pm

Many thanks Shelley,
Yes you are spot on, it is all around us, and there are so many people that just don’t take the time to look! :)

Cheers
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Re: Homework 9/4/22 'Visor Dawning'

Post by Catherine Lee » Mon Apr 18, 2022 7:40 pm

Fabulous, Ron! Got me from the very first lovely line and continued to hold my attention and imagination throughout! Cerulean skies on steroids – Clever! As is the reference to the Twelve Apostles appearing as shattered skeletons. I can so clearly see the flowers, the lake, the piddle of a puddle, swirling red dust tunnel and rooster-tails of fine red mist. Pat yourself on the back with this one – I was riding there right along with you!

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Re: Homework 9/4/22 'Visor Dawning'

Post by Ron » Tue Apr 19, 2022 3:33 pm

Thanks so much Catherine for your kind and thoughtful words, they are much appreciated!
So glad you enjoyed the poem (and the ride of course!😊)
I think the diversity and beauty of our country lends itself to creating word pictures!
Cheers
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Re: Homework 9/4/22 'Visor Dawning'

Post by mummsie » Wed May 04, 2022 11:16 am

Beautifully descriptive Ron with many stand out lines and great use of the prompts, what a treasure trove of images you have stored! Well done!

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