June Homework 'Reminising'

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Terry
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June Homework 'Reminising'

Post by Terry » Thu Jun 09, 2022 11:50 am

As This wasn't really homework I have decided to remove it.

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Re: June Homework 'Reminising'

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Thu Jun 09, 2022 1:07 pm

WOW! I love it - your words had me walking alongside you and seeing through your eyes. Magic. Well done you - I reckon that is a comp entry if ever I saw one.
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Re: June Homework 'Reminising'

Post by Terry » Thu Jun 09, 2022 3:47 pm

Thanks Maureen

As mentioned this is fudging a bit, but decided to finish it while in the mood.

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Re: June Homework 'Reminising'

Post by Catherine Lee » Thu Jun 09, 2022 7:04 pm

Yep, as always Terry, you take us right there with your wonderful imagery, and you also capture this man’s mood and feelings so well as he reminisces. Meanwhile your rhyme scheme ensures a lovely smooth flow of words and there are some wonderful phrases and lines. I thoroughly enjoyed this poem and feel Maureen is right – it is competition material.

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Re: June Homework 'Reminising'

Post by Terry » Thu Jun 09, 2022 10:58 pm

Thanks Catherine

As already mentioned I have fudged a bit this month.
I had started his poem last month and was on a bit of a roll so decided to finish it while the muse was there.
Always enjoy your comments.

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Re: June Homework 'Reminising'

Post by Ron » Fri Jun 10, 2022 2:28 pm

Really enjoyed this 'Reminiscing' poem Terry,
I totally agree with the others comments! In particular Catherine's reference to the rhyming scheme. It definately does ensure a smooth easy to read flow of the lines.
I have a feeling that there is a lot more than, 'just a bit', of autobiographical content in this poem! :D
It was a pleasure to read mate, well done,
Ron.

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Re: June Homework 'Reminising'

Post by Terry » Fri Jun 10, 2022 4:24 pm

Thanks Ron

I started out thinking that I'd write a short poem using this technique,
but once I got started the plan grew.
You and Catherine mention how the poem flows, that's one of the characteristics of this style.
I try to use as little punctuation as possible, only breaking the flow where absolutely necessary,
and leaving it to the reader to put in their own natural slight pauses if they wish.

It's been awhile since I've written one of these, but always enjoy the challenge that they present (for me at least).

Thanks mate for your comments - there could be some truth in your final observation.

Terry

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