ABPA - Australian Bush Poets Association

A Winter Poem

I'm sitting here freezing
the air is still and quiet.

Shit it is cold

The End

I can't see any metaphor, figurative or lyrical intent. can't hear a poem in that.

More a poetic weather forecast than a poem perhaps

You need to read it again Neville.


Close your eyes and the picture will come to you .

A Winter Poem

I'm sitting here freezing
the air is still and quiet.

Shit it is cold

The End

Hey, Pacey's in Yeppoon, in an outside dunny - of course he's freezing.
(Sheeesh, give the bloke a break)

well if he was in an outside dunny Manny I doubt the air would be still and quiet

How can I read it again if I have my eyes closed.

Damm ya hafta xplain some things in detail

You need to read it again .

Then

Close your eyes

the picture will come to you .


Bob

Scary hey

I think you mean "scary hey?"

I doubt there's anything left at the bottom of that particular barrel to scrape Bob!