A Sonnet 'DAWN'

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Terry
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A Sonnet 'DAWN'

Post by Terry » Sat Oct 02, 2021 3:21 pm

DAWN
There’s something magic with the dawn each day
As though the sins of yesterday are gone
And now the world can seek another way
To right past wrongs at last and then move on.

Then as the first flush paints the sleeping sky
it lifts the veil of darkness each new morn
And brings a freshness now to catch the eye
And so once more another day is born.

And as the threads of darkness melt away
We see the pristine beauty then unfold
A special place where golden sunbeams play
God's gift to man for all to now behold.

A fragile earth entrusted to our care
And yet the warning signs are also there


© T. E. Piggott

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Re: A Sonnet 'DAWN'

Post by Shelley Hansen » Sat Oct 02, 2021 3:35 pm

Oh boy, Terry - you are on a roll!

Love this one - and you've nailed the clincher couplet at the end. Another true Shakespearean!

Editor note - I've just adjusted your apostrophe in "God's", which was showing up as a comma.

Thanks for kicking off our new forum section with a sonnet.

Cheers
Shelley
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Re: A Sonnet 'DAWN'

Post by Terry » Sun Oct 03, 2021 3:36 pm

Hi and thanks Shelley

Thanks for fixing my typo - can't believe I didn't see it.

I get the feeling that if you want to do these rally well,
it will take a long time to learn the ropes.
I can understand now how you yourself spent years honing your skills,
to reach a standard that you were satisfied with.

Terry

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Re: A Sonnet 'DAWN'

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Mon Oct 04, 2021 9:24 am

How lovely - I think you have a bit of a talent for these Terry. A timely warning as well, one that those of us on the same spectrum often make mention of but sadly it seems to go unnoticed by the majority these days.
Check out The Scribbly Bark Poets blog site here -
http://scribblybarkpoetry.blogspot.com.au/


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Re: A Sonnet 'DAWN'

Post by Terry » Mon Oct 04, 2021 11:18 pm

It's all Fairly new to me Maureen.

Shelley warned that writing sonnets can cast a spell on you.
I have a sneaky feeling she may be right.

Terry

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Re: A Sonnet 'DAWN'

Post by Ron » Thu Oct 07, 2021 5:20 pm

Really liked this Terry, once again you have painted great pictures with your words and finished with a sobering message, well done.
( The first stanza reminded me of a bloke I worked with years ago whose favourite saying each morning was, ''This is the first day of the rest of my life!'')
Cheers
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Re: A Sonnet 'DAWN'

Post by Terry » Fri Oct 08, 2021 11:18 am

Thanks Ron

I wonder why I haven't taken a more serious look at these before?

Better put up some Homework prompts Maureen before I get completely hooked.

Terry

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