Natures Beauty

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Natures Beauty

Post by Irene » Sun Jul 03, 2011 11:23 am

I think I have to make a point of walking more - it's the only time I feel inspired to write anything lately!!! :(
Went for a walk along a walk trail beside the ocean late yesterday afternoon: beautiful winters day - windy, drizzling, cold, overcast - but plenty of breaks in the clouds for the sun to peep through at times.

A Winters Day
©Irene Conner
02/07/11

A west wind o'er the ocean blows,
wraps ' round me from the back.
The ocean tide with gusto flows,
my music on the track.

The grass upon the beach sand bends
and waves on natures breeze.
The sun, it's rays through cloud breaks sends
to gift the sights that please.

A rainbow paints the shadowed sky,
it' s beauty free to all.
While overhead the seagulls fly;
my souls reflects their call.

A cry of joy for natures best
through rain and wind and cold.
All earthly worries laid to rest
before the day grows old.

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Shame you can never capture the true beauty of nature!!
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Re: Natures Beauty

Post by Dave Smith » Sun Jul 03, 2011 11:38 am

Nice Irene, and you have a nice beach to walk along, nothing like the sound of the ocean to clear your mind.

TTFN 8-)
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Re: Natures Beauty

Post by r.magnay » Sun Jul 03, 2011 1:43 pm

...leave off you mob........nice poem Irene as we have come to expect from you, it just makes me work harder to make that sea change we are working on.
Ross

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Re: Natures Beauty

Post by Bob Pacey » Sun Jul 03, 2011 2:03 pm

Hey Ross log onto Coolwaters Holiday Village web site and have a look mate. Should have done it years ago.


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Re: Natures Beauty

Post by Neville Briggs » Sun Jul 03, 2011 2:28 pm

Irene wrote:The sun, it's rays through cloud breaks send
to gift the sights that please.
Good one Irene.
All the sentences are brief and clear, except I stumbled over that sentence that I've quoted above. I am not clear on which verb is related to which subject and predicate.
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Re: Natures Beauty

Post by Dave Smith » Sun Jul 03, 2011 4:37 pm

Irene, a question, as Neville is saying I to stumbled a bit over the word gift and wondered if it’s a typo and you meant “gilt” i.e. “to gilt the sights that please.”
Please correct me Thanks Dave.

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Re: Natures Beauty

Post by Dave Smith » Sun Jul 03, 2011 4:43 pm

Ross we’re coming your way early in October do ya want us to bring ya a bucket of beach sand with some sea water, bit of sea weed perhaps? :P

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Re: Natures Beauty

Post by r.magnay » Sun Jul 03, 2011 5:55 pm

Thanks Dave, I will be seeing the sea before then so I'll get my temporary fix then! :D
Ross

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Re: Natures Beauty

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Mon Jul 04, 2011 7:36 am

as always Irene just wonderful. Perhaps 'a gift' might work better? Love the rainbow. Good to see you getting a bit of ME time

Stay well

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Re: Natures Beauty

Post by Zondrae » Mon Jul 04, 2011 9:43 am

G'day Irene,

Good to see you writing. I 'get' the phrase you have used. In this case the word 'gift' could be read as 'give'. Sometimes the comon word, as in 'give', isn't exactly what we wish to say in a poem. The choice of 'gift' is so much more poetic, I feel. You can give something without the joy, but if you 'gift' something, it is usually a bit less ordinary.

Lovely poem. You can't beat the gifts of nature for a topic.
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