T-Bone's Ninety Nine- with puchooashion but may need more

[Maureen K Clifford]

Love it Marty - well done - cranky sheep are the pits

[Heather]

You are getting very descriptive now Marty - it's good.

I want to know how Hat Cracker got his nick name.

Heather

[Dennis N O'Brien]

Nothing wrong with poetic license - the only one you don't have to pay for.

[warooa]

Yeah good one Marty . . . great to get the guts of the Laggan shearers yarns from across the bar.

Cheers, Marty

[Bob Pacey]

Bet this one goes down well at the pub Marty, great when you can write the story in a poem and all the listeners are in on the story.



Good one mate.


Bob

[Bob Pacey]

yeah i know what you mean I'm working on one for a big tough bloke who's sister says he is scared of frogs.


This is a bloke who will not hesitate to grab a brown snake and whip crack it but chuck a green frog at him and he freaks.


Bob

[Neville Briggs]

That looks pretty good Marty. It would be easier to read if you worked on the punctuation a bit I don't think that punctuation should be a hoop for writers to jump through it's an aid to the reader to receive the message better.

[Neville Briggs]

That looks better I think . I don't think there are rules for commas, I reckon they just go with the feel of the rhythm, so I guess some people have different ideas of where commas should go. You reminded me of thoughts about inverted commas for speech, I'll put that question in the discussion page.