HW November - Objection Mollified
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- Catherine Lee
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HW November - Objection Mollified
Just a bit of fun...
Objection Mollified
“Don’t do a Melba here”, she moaned, “I’m just not in the mood.
Your drama-queen acts wear me down – now come and get your food…
You promised me you’d given up on such unthinking ways—
now here you are repeating your mistakes, with eyes ablaze!
Come back here! Are your ears just painted on? I know you hear!
I want to have a chat about this bloke, and make it clear
he’s not for you. He’s rough as guts. What’s more, from what I see,
apparently, he’s fallen from that famous ugly tree.
What is it that you see in him? It can’t be intellect—
he’s barmy as a bandicoot and doesn’t show respect.
It’s time you called the shots, my girl, and sent him down the track—
said, “See you round like rissoles. Never bother coming back!”
You say his blood’s worth bottling, yet I can’t see this is true.
Enlighten me – he seems so lazy, has no point of view!
I looked at her and whimpered in my most pathetic way,
“I love him, Mum, it’s simply that – what more is there to say?”
She heaved frustrated sighs, but when he suddenly strolled in,
just couldn’t help herself – I found it hard to hide my grin.
“Oh, come on then”, she murmured low—soft heart could not disguise—
for just like me she melted in those mournful canine eyes.
© Catherine Lee, 2022
Objection Mollified
“Don’t do a Melba here”, she moaned, “I’m just not in the mood.
Your drama-queen acts wear me down – now come and get your food…
You promised me you’d given up on such unthinking ways—
now here you are repeating your mistakes, with eyes ablaze!
Come back here! Are your ears just painted on? I know you hear!
I want to have a chat about this bloke, and make it clear
he’s not for you. He’s rough as guts. What’s more, from what I see,
apparently, he’s fallen from that famous ugly tree.
What is it that you see in him? It can’t be intellect—
he’s barmy as a bandicoot and doesn’t show respect.
It’s time you called the shots, my girl, and sent him down the track—
said, “See you round like rissoles. Never bother coming back!”
You say his blood’s worth bottling, yet I can’t see this is true.
Enlighten me – he seems so lazy, has no point of view!
I looked at her and whimpered in my most pathetic way,
“I love him, Mum, it’s simply that – what more is there to say?”
She heaved frustrated sighs, but when he suddenly strolled in,
just couldn’t help herself – I found it hard to hide my grin.
“Oh, come on then”, she murmured low—soft heart could not disguise—
for just like me she melted in those mournful canine eyes.
© Catherine Lee, 2022
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Re: HW November - Objection Mollified
Love it Catherine, great use of the prompts too!
The last line was a cracker, really was the Twist in the tale (tail! ) and a wagging one at that!
Really well done! Great read!
Cheers
Ron.
The last line was a cracker, really was the Twist in the tale (tail! ) and a wagging one at that!
Really well done! Great read!
Cheers
Ron.
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Re: HW November - Objection Mollified
Catherine so well done! I just Love it. Nice twist as well!
- Catherine Lee
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Re: HW November - Objection Mollified
Ah, thanks so much, Ron and Dolly - not my usual style of poetry but I could never resist a twist in the "tail"!
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Re: HW November - Objection Mollified
Excellent, Catherine! Succinct, humorous and written with skill. I especially like short poems with a surprise ending like your witty Objection Mollified. It was fun reading it! Gary
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Re: HW November - Objection Mollified
Love it and especially the twist in the tail - nicely done and you had me sucked in right to the end - great use of the prompts and as you said - good fun.
Hope you enjoyed the challenge Catherine
Hope you enjoyed the challenge Catherine
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- Catherine Lee
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Re: HW November - Objection Mollified
Thank you so much, Gary and Maureen - so pleased you enjoyed it....Glad I had you, Maureen. A tough challenge for me, but yes, it was fun in the end x
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Re: HW November - Objection Mollified
Hi Catherine
Just realized I hadn't commented on this one,
Excellent as always.
And by the way, congratulations on your back-to-back Silver Quill win.
Terry
Just realized I hadn't commented on this one,
Excellent as always.
And by the way, congratulations on your back-to-back Silver Quill win.
Terry
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Re: HW November - Objection Mollified
Thanks heaps, Terry - on both counts! xx
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Re: HW November - Objection Mollified
That's a beauty, Catherine!
Great use of the prompts as always, and like the others, I'm a sucker for surprise endings!
Great use of the prompts as always, and like the others, I'm a sucker for surprise endings!
Shelley Hansen
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http://www.shelleyhansen.com
"Look fer yer profits in the 'earts o' friends,
fer 'atin' never paid no dividends."
(CJ Dennis "The Mooch o' Life")