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The Light in My Eyes

Posted: Sun Mar 04, 2012 11:42 am
by Mal McLean
Met me darling 40 years ago today. Couldn't let that go by without writing her a love poem.

The Light in My Eye.
(For Christine)

We met on that warm autumn evening
all these four decades ago
and caught in my life’s softest dreaming
felt the pure surge of loves flow.

I thought I had known some affection;
tested that bitter sweet pain;
your eyes lit my eyes in reflection
giving full sense of my gain.

Through struggles and dire predictions
you kept me safe on your shore
while billows of endless conflictions
shook both my body and core.

So now we are older, are ageing,
youth must so slowly take flight,
but til the sun sets on my living
you will shine on as my light.

The light in my eye keeps on shining;
loving and caring we hold
the fire in the furnace still burning;
hearts that will never grow old.

©Malcolm McLean Beveridge 4/3/2012.

Re: The Light in My Eyes

Posted: Sun Mar 04, 2012 12:13 pm
by Heather
aaaah, you big ol' sweetie you. :)


I wish someone would write me a poem..... :)

Re: The Light in My Eyes

Posted: Mon Mar 05, 2012 7:42 am
by Neville Briggs
Good one Mal.


Sorry.... I have a suggestion. In line 2 why don't you just say "all those forty years ago"
don't you think that sounds more heart to heart than " decades ".

Re: The Light in My Eyes

Posted: Mon Mar 05, 2012 7:49 am
by Maureen K Clifford
Your lady must be feeling very special Mal - that's lovely.

Can't have Heather feeling neglected though so this is for Heather


Heather is so pretty
clever and quite witty
Heather wants a ditty
here ‘tis – but itty bitty
:lol: :lol: :lol:

Re: The Light in My Eyes

Posted: Mon Mar 05, 2012 8:46 am
by manfredvijars
Heather wrote:I wish someone would write me a poem..... :)
For Heather ...

G'day Heather,
Sitting on your nether
enjoying the weather?
We must get together ...
Sometime. ..... :D :lol:

Re: The Light in My Eyes

Posted: Mon Mar 05, 2012 2:01 pm
by Heather
I luvs ya you crazy lot! :D

Thank you.. :)

Re: The Light in My Eyes

Posted: Mon Mar 05, 2012 2:58 pm
by Mal McLean
:o It was Nev! Good pick. I changed it to get a better rhythm outcome. The rest of you blokes and sheilas are crazy. :)

Re: The Light in My Eyes

Posted: Mon Mar 05, 2012 5:42 pm
by Neville Briggs
You heard it from me Mal, if there's a choice between supposed accurate metre and the best words for a love poem, then the metre can be " inaccurate ' ( whatever that might mean ) ;) :o :)

Re: The Light in My Eyes

Posted: Mon Mar 05, 2012 6:52 pm
by Bob Pacey
Huh !!!!! play it again Sam,


Bob