Homework WE 9/2/15 - Cinquain for Summer

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Homework WE 9/2/15 - Cinquain for Summer

Post by Shelley Hansen » Fri Jan 30, 2015 5:26 pm

Cinquain for Summer
(c) Shelley Hansen 30/1/15

Summer
blistering road
bounces heat-shimmer back
striking my eyes without mercy
scorching

Summer
breathing hot air
through the dust in my throat
searching horizon for storm clouds
brewing

Summer
slicing white light
preludes thunder's refrain
torrents of water stream earthward
blessing
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Re: Homework WE 9/2/15 - Cinquain for Summer

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Sat Jan 31, 2015 2:58 pm

Oh this is lovely Shelley - well done - love the way you have captured the feeling of the heat and the dust and the final blessed release when that rain finally falls. Nicely crafted.
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Post by Shelley Hansen » Mon Feb 02, 2015 9:13 am

Thank you Maureen - it certainly is the season for it!
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Post by Maureen K Clifford » Mon Feb 02, 2015 1:24 pm

I'm going to set this up on a picture background for you - just searching for a picture to do it justice.
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Re: Homework WE 9/2/15 - Cinquain for Summer

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Mon Feb 02, 2015 1:52 pm

Here you go - hope you like it
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Post by Shelley Hansen » Mon Feb 02, 2015 2:01 pm

Wow! Yes indeed - thank you so much!
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Re: Homework WE 9/2/15 - Cinquain for Summer

Post by alongtimegone » Wed Feb 11, 2015 10:15 am

Very nicely contrived and written Shelley.
wazza

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