If These Walls Could Talk.

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If These Walls Could Talk.

Post by Bob Pacey » Tue Jun 30, 2015 6:13 pm

If These Walls Could Talk.

'Twas many years ago she left during the winter thaw
and I still have not forgot her to this day.
I still feel now her sweet caress it chills me to the bone
more so when winters sky turns ghostly grey.

I still swear I see her walking when sun on snow heralds the melt
and clear water spreads across the dry flood plains.
Could it be a trick of light that shows her silhouette against the sky
or dreams that reignite those long forgotten pains.

I would watch as she lay sleeping gentle curls about her head
touch her lips with an awakening kiss.
She would stir ever so slowly and her smile would cheers my heart
it's the little things she did I really miss.

I don't know why she left that day we seemed so happy then
but it appears she wanted more then I could give.
If these walls could talk they'd tell of happiness far out of reach
no love just life that I alone must live.


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Re: If These Walls Could Talk.

Post by Shelley Hansen » Tue Jun 30, 2015 7:16 pm

This is a bit sombre for you Bob! Seriously, you have really picked up the prompts and used them well. As Maureen says, it is fascinating to see the different approaches we all take to the same phrases!

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Re: If These Walls Could Talk.

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Tue Jun 30, 2015 9:44 pm

The underlying sadness is tangible in this piece Bob - great use of the prompts - particularly like this line
dreams that reignite those long forgotten pains.
so much said in those few words. Nicely done.

Might want to fix that first word s/b 'twas

Really liked this one Bob - you did good ;)
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Re: If These Walls Could Talk.

Post by Catherine Lee » Wed Jul 01, 2015 5:24 pm

Beautifully done Bob - a lovely piece and so sad and poignant: 'It's the little things she did I really miss' and 'dreams that reignite those long forgotten pains'. I really like this one.

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Re: If These Walls Could Talk.

Post by Bob Pacey » Wed Jul 01, 2015 6:45 pm

Thanks Mausie, sheelley and Catherine

A little bit of truth and fiction combined but up to the reader to guess which.



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