Homework WE 24-8-15 - The Street Where I Grew Up

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Homework WE 24-8-15 - The Street Where I Grew Up

Post by Shelley Hansen » Tue Aug 18, 2015 1:23 pm

The Street Where I Grew Up
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I see it through nostalgia's eyes - the street where I grew up.
Like many country towns, its girth was wide -
the only avenue of stately jacaranda trees
with timber houses queueing side by side.

My parents stood and chatted with the folk who lived next door,
the seeds of friendship sown "across the fence".
Mum served a daily diet that was rich in homemade fare
and liberally spiced with common sense.

We kids played backyard cricket, ran our go-carts down the hill -
our Saturdays were filled with joyous play.
The only time we went "online" was pegging out the clothes
while giving Mum a hand on washing day!

Once more I walk along this street to capture if I can
the majesty of yesterday's sweet song.
My mind's eye builds a landscape I expect to be the same
when suddenly I notice something's wrong.

The trees are gone - replaced with fences over six feet high,
no sound of children's laughter fills the air.
I long for cheery greetings, but each door is bolted tight
and no one even knows that I am there.

The sun has risen twenty thousand times since I was here
and fifty years have washed away my youth.
I feel bereft and sad - so much has changed, not least myself -
until I realise a simple truth ...

Though time may take us far away from places in the heart,
though years may yield their share of storms and strife,
we're never really destitute while memories of gold
weave thread-like through the tapestry of life.
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Re: Homework WE 24-8-15 - The Street Where I Grew Up

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Tue Aug 18, 2015 2:44 pm

Oh my - this is wonderful Shelley. That last verse says it all and this line is a pearler
The only time we went "online" was pegging out the clothes
You have made great use of the prompts and I loved taking this walk back in time. Well done.
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Post by Shelley Hansen » Tue Aug 18, 2015 5:30 pm

Thank you so much Maureen - I really appreciate your commendation.

I liked these prompts - they were very evocative ... thanks Bob!

Cheers, Shelley
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Post by Trisha Patterson » Tue Aug 18, 2015 6:43 pm

Wow! I really like that Shelley...so evocative.
Trish

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Post by Catherine Lee » Wed Aug 19, 2015 2:15 pm

Fantastic Shelley! It gave me goose bumps, which is always a good sign for me! This is very true and you have written it so beautifully to describe all the thoughts and feelings such nostalgia evokes, to end on that lovely simple and positive truth about memories being gold. Love it!

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Post by Shelley Hansen » Wed Aug 19, 2015 9:37 pm

Thanks so much Trish and Catherine! Your positive comments are a real encouragement. Based on the good feedback I've had, I might take the time to expand this poem into a longer version - we'll see what the brain can dig up!

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Re: Homework WE 24-8-15 - The Street Where I Grew Up

Post by alongtimegone » Thu Aug 20, 2015 9:34 am

Wonderful piece of writing Shelley. I really enjoyed the read. Some poems I read twice. The first time to get the feel, the second time to appreciate. Read yours three times.
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Post by Shelley Hansen » Thu Aug 20, 2015 5:55 pm

Wow! Thanks so much Wazza - that's a great accolade. Really appreciate it.

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