Homework w/e 21.9.15 - Sanctuary

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Homework w/e 21.9.15 - Sanctuary

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Sun Sep 13, 2015 3:59 pm

Sanctuary … Maureen Clifford © The #ScribblyBark Poet

He’d walked in other’s shoes before – and he recalled it well,
to escape racial tyranny, to flee from war and hell
and now, here on a different shore, and in a different clime
he prayed that God would grant him peace, that God would give him time.

He stood there in the bargain clothes that helpers had supplied
white salt runnels dried on his cheeks from happy tears he’d cried.
He knew the road ahead would still be tough, not worry free
but to this land he gave his heart and soul. His home ‘twould be.

He’d spent long months with others in the camps, and that was hard
but still better than living with a war that yard by yard
destroyed , defiled his homeland, where he’d lost the one thing precious
that he had, his wife and unborn child – killed in street fighting vicious.

This land had opportunity, shops, factories and homes
and whilst the wharves were deep in trash – its treasures would atone
to offer help and dignity and once more bring him peace
and he in time would find again sweet sleep – nightmares surcease.

He’d repay to this country the huge debt. His gratitude
would recompense their Government for shelter, clothing , food
and given half a chance he’d proudly call this country home
until wrapped in her sweet embrace he rests in rich red loam.
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Post by Shelley Hansen » Sun Sep 13, 2015 4:44 pm

Very powerful word picture, Maureen.
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Re: Homework w/e 21.9.15 - Sanctuary

Post by DollyDot » Sun Sep 13, 2015 6:52 pm

Wow Maureen!

Some fantastic descriptive and unusual words which conjure up some great images for the reader. Thankyou!

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Post by Maureen K Clifford » Sun Sep 13, 2015 7:13 pm

Oh Goody :D Seems the picture came through - I had big doubts about this one - Thank you lovely ladies for reading and commenting.
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Post by Neville Briggs » Mon Sep 14, 2015 7:55 am

Well done Maureen, you've come at it from a different direction than what the listed words might suggest. :)
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Post by Maureen K Clifford » Tue Sep 15, 2015 8:11 am

My mind works in mysterious ways Neville :lol:
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Re: Homework w/e 21.9.15 - Sanctuary

Post by Catherine Lee » Thu Sep 17, 2015 5:09 am

Love this Maureen - very strong picture and a brilliant angle for the prompts!

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