Homework 01/03/16

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Wendy Seddon
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Homework 01/03/16

Post by Wendy Seddon » Thu Feb 25, 2016 3:36 pm

...and now for something completely different.

Holes in my pocket and one in my shoe.
End of my wits and alternatives too.
Recession
depression
aggression.
Bright lights of fortune don’t shine upon me,
First one in line but the last one they see.
Frustration
starvation
damnation.
Yet I have blessings, I’ve counted them all -
you to uphold me whenever I fall.
emotion
devotion
in motion
There’s one last thing that I really must do
pass by the florist – red flowers for you.
Wen de Rhymewriter There is nothing mundane about the ordinary.
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Re: Homework 01/03/16

Post by Neville Briggs » Thu Feb 25, 2016 4:01 pm

I love it :D wonderful energy and passion in a small package.
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Re: Homework 01/03/16

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Thu Feb 25, 2016 6:41 pm

Different in a good way Owly- it has a vibrance about it - I like it and a good use of the prompts as well
Check out The Scribbly Bark Poets blog site here -
http://scribblybarkpoetry.blogspot.com.au/


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Re: Homework 01/03/16

Post by Heather » Fri Feb 26, 2016 8:11 am

Enjoyable, clever and lovely Wendy.

Heather :)
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Re: Homework 01/03/16

Post by Catherine Lee » Sat Feb 27, 2016 6:03 pm

Love it Wendy - innovative, positive and punchy
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Re: Homework 01/03/16

Post by Shelley Hansen » Mon Feb 29, 2016 10:46 pm

Really innovative, Wendy. A good one for submission to an open competition for limited line poetry - such as the annual Rabindranath Tagore award for 25 lines or less. It's based in India and has closed for this year - but I'd save it for next year if I were you!

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