Homework for April 22 'Brothers No More'
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Homework for April 22 'Brothers No More'
You wonder where these come from – perhaps an overheard scrap of conversation – who knows.
(2) I have made changes to the second stanza
Brothers No More
He had woken from a troubled sleep that stirred a hidden fear,
as his mind had drifted through the misty veils of yesteryear
Where once hidden skeletons, had come alive again that night,
to torment in dreams that seemed so real he’d woken now in fright.
He’d been looking through a window back into a troubled past
where his mind seemed trapped forever or as long as sleep would last
Even now awake, he can’t escape reality he knows,
for the truth will always haunt him and the pain it brings still shows.
As he thinks about a brother who’s been missing now for years
and remembers too their parting as they both fought back their tears.
There had seemed to be no reason for the rift that had occurred,
When he stormed out years ago – since then, there’s not a thing’s been heard.
With his last words laced with bitterness, he gave no reason why,
but said he wanted no more contact and begged him not to try.
As the years had dragged on slowly by, the sense of loss had grown,
he had lost his only brother and the mateship they’d once known.
He remembers still the good times that the two of them had shared,
for the bond had been so strong then, in the knowledge they both cared.
They had searched for hidden treasures in the back block’s way out west
and it’s hard to now believe that they would fail the final test.
He had never found the reason and the facts remain as blurred,
not a trace has since been found, nor has he heard a single word.
And his mind can find no peace until he learns his brother’s fate,
knowing even if successful, it’s probably now too late.
© T.E. Piggott
(2) I have made changes to the second stanza
Brothers No More
He had woken from a troubled sleep that stirred a hidden fear,
as his mind had drifted through the misty veils of yesteryear
Where once hidden skeletons, had come alive again that night,
to torment in dreams that seemed so real he’d woken now in fright.
He’d been looking through a window back into a troubled past
where his mind seemed trapped forever or as long as sleep would last
Even now awake, he can’t escape reality he knows,
for the truth will always haunt him and the pain it brings still shows.
As he thinks about a brother who’s been missing now for years
and remembers too their parting as they both fought back their tears.
There had seemed to be no reason for the rift that had occurred,
When he stormed out years ago – since then, there’s not a thing’s been heard.
With his last words laced with bitterness, he gave no reason why,
but said he wanted no more contact and begged him not to try.
As the years had dragged on slowly by, the sense of loss had grown,
he had lost his only brother and the mateship they’d once known.
He remembers still the good times that the two of them had shared,
for the bond had been so strong then, in the knowledge they both cared.
They had searched for hidden treasures in the back block’s way out west
and it’s hard to now believe that they would fail the final test.
He had never found the reason and the facts remain as blurred,
not a trace has since been found, nor has he heard a single word.
And his mind can find no peace until he learns his brother’s fate,
knowing even if successful, it’s probably now too late.
© T.E. Piggott
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Re: Homework for April 22 'Brothers No More'
A good story Terry - one that has no doubt been repeated many times over, sadly.
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Re: Homework for April 22 'Brothers No More'
Hi Shelley
Sort of got of track and lost my way a bit on this one.
Ended up with this, which hardly fits the subject.
Terry
Sort of got of track and lost my way a bit on this one.
Ended up with this, which hardly fits the subject.
Terry
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Re: Homework for April 22 'Brothers No More'
It fits the subject just fine Terry - well done ... at a later stage if you had the inclination you could maybe add a stanza or two showing how his brother was found and seen through that same window walking up the path to his old home. I love happy endings
We have a cousin in our family who has done the same thing - living in Spain with no contact with family ... very sad - but families do tend to fracture and some fractures are sadly never mended.

We have a cousin in our family who has done the same thing - living in Spain with no contact with family ... very sad - but families do tend to fracture and some fractures are sadly never mended.
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Re: Homework for April 22 'Brothers No More'
Thanks Maureen
That's an excellent idea, I might just give that a go!
Terry
That's an excellent idea, I might just give that a go!
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Re: Homework for April 22 'Brothers No More'
G'day Terry,
A really good yarn and you have told it well!
Sadly the storyline is not an isolated case, as there would be so many out there that are wondering about vanished family members.
I know of a case first hand here, that is too long to go into, but fortunately it had a happy outcome!
Enjoyed the read mate, well done.
Ron
A really good yarn and you have told it well!
Sadly the storyline is not an isolated case, as there would be so many out there that are wondering about vanished family members.
I know of a case first hand here, that is too long to go into, but fortunately it had a happy outcome!
Enjoyed the read mate, well done.
Ron
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Re: Homework for April 22 'Brothers No More'
Thanks Ron
I agree, I even went missing myself once when opal mining as a young bloke,
Just a thoughtless act on my part - poor old Dad had feared the worst.
Terry
I agree, I even went missing myself once when opal mining as a young bloke,
Just a thoughtless act on my part - poor old Dad had feared the worst.
Terry
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Re: Homework for April 22 'Brothers No More'
A sad tale, Terry, and one that you've told so well, as always.. Yes, there are many such stories out there unfortunately.... From the first stanza where you set the scene to the very last one with its added poignancy of possibly now being too late, it really flows well and makes the reader feel it and relate.
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Re: Homework for April 22 'Brothers No More'
Thanks Catherine
Terry
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