Homework week ending 6-2-2010 Sentinels

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Maureen K Clifford
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Re: Homework week ending 6-2-2010 Sentinels

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Mon Jan 23, 2012 1:08 pm

Fabulous - a bit of Mr Sheen and it will sparkle like a diamond. Some good strong lines in there Marty I particularly liked

Try to spot the gecko motionless against the mottled stone .
Is that him of just a piece of flaking wall ?
Was that movement or a shadow? No! You’ve lost him once again ,
at hiding he’s the master of them all

though you need a ? mark and a ! to make it tighter IMO

Good writing Marty

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