Oh your'e good - two goes. You get a gold star for that.
This is an interesting poem as I read it initially as a teacher but then though no its about a Father - I guess it's a bit of both.
I like the rhyming scheme and even though it's not a lengthy poem it says what it needs to say and does it well. It's punch IMO is in its brevity. Hard hitting with no surplus padding. I think it's very good Marty and really like it. Thank you for sharing.
Cheers
Maureen
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Very good Marty.
My theory is, if you are " a bit dry " just keep on trying out small things like this. Keep them together in a notebook and later you will find a good collection of small
sketches, so to speak, which are very valuable for building up a larger work if you wish.
Maybe you already do that.
I keep a collection ( living in hope
I also keep in my notebook, phrases I hear or think of that seem interesting. In no particular order. Hopefully they could come in useful later. It's a sort of brainstorming exercise.
My theory is, if you are " a bit dry " just keep on trying out small things like this. Keep them together in a notebook and later you will find a good collection of small
sketches, so to speak, which are very valuable for building up a larger work if you wish.
Maybe you already do that.


I also keep in my notebook, phrases I hear or think of that seem interesting. In no particular order. Hopefully they could come in useful later. It's a sort of brainstorming exercise.
Neville
" Prose is description, poetry is presence " Les Murray.
" Prose is description, poetry is presence " Les Murray.