The Music of the River's Flow
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- alongtimegone
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The Music of the River's Flow
A very enjoyable challenge Maureen.
Wazza
A symphony I knew so well
yet held me still within its spell.
From tide to tide now fast now slow;
the music of the river’s flow
The ferry man so skilfully
did berth a mere four bars from me,
arpeggios from long ago.
The music of the river’s flow
The concertgoers disembarked
as wave tops struck the accent mark.
With pontoons resonating low
the music of the river’s flow
I felt and heard, my senses sharp
the overtones of nature’s harp.
Wild waters dancing to and fro.
The music of the river’s flow
A symphony I knew so well
The music of the river’s flow.
Wazza
A symphony I knew so well
yet held me still within its spell.
From tide to tide now fast now slow;
the music of the river’s flow
The ferry man so skilfully
did berth a mere four bars from me,
arpeggios from long ago.
The music of the river’s flow
The concertgoers disembarked
as wave tops struck the accent mark.
With pontoons resonating low
the music of the river’s flow
I felt and heard, my senses sharp
the overtones of nature’s harp.
Wild waters dancing to and fro.
The music of the river’s flow
A symphony I knew so well
The music of the river’s flow.
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Re: The Music of the River's Flow
A very apt metaphor, Warren...nicely done!
Cheers
David
Cheers
David
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Re: The Music of the River's Flow
Thank you David.
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Re: The Music of the River's Flow
That is nicely done Wazza - going to share that over to our FB page mate - you met the challenge well - thanks for having a go at it 

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Re: The Music of the River's Flow
Thanks Heather.
Thank you Maureen ... I have just edited it. Capitals were starting every line ... not good.
Wazza
Thank you Maureen ... I have just edited it. Capitals were starting every line ... not good.
Wazza
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I hate that I confess but so many poets still do it that way - freedom of choice though.
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Re: The Music of the River's Flow
There is no rule that says capitals can't be used for each line. It serves to mark the formal structure; that's mainly it I think. A bit like how some artists do drawings and leave in place construction lines that mark their setting out of shapes and main angles, other artists erase those lines to " finish " the drawing. Or like those mechanical things made of clear plastic so that you can see the inner working.
A few formalist modern poets capitalise lines, so it is acceptable in contemporary use.
A few formalist modern poets capitalise lines, so it is acceptable in contemporary use.
Neville
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" Prose is description, poetry is presence " Les Murray.
Re: The Music of the River's Flow
Agree rules are there to break.
Always
Nev
But that, Mr longtimegone Cox, is remarkably well put.
Cheers, Marty
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But that, Mr longtimegone Cox, is remarkably well put.
Cheers, Marty
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Re: The Music of the River's Flow
I said there is no rule involved here , Marty .
Sorry Wazza, Good poem.


Sorry Wazza, Good poem.

Neville
" Prose is description, poetry is presence " Les Murray.
" Prose is description, poetry is presence " Les Murray.