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The Muster

Posted: Fri Jul 17, 2015 6:45 am
by Bob Pacey
The Muster

As they gathered at the stockyards expectation filled the air
the final moments always were the worse.
The wild bulls wicked horns glistened in the setting sun
I heard one ringer mutter then a curse.

These were the pikers and scrubbers from the final musters sweep
brought in from gullies in the ranges dark.
they were wild and wicked bovines who were very quick to rile
and to brand them, well it was a frightening task.

Like some raging wall of terror they bustled to and fro
lolling tongues and wild eyes showed their building fright.
Still the riotous ringers gathered on the railings and the posts
as they soaked up the excitement of the fight.

The branding irons were ready glowing in the setting sun
they climbed into the yard and grabbed their gear.
No torture here or sadness they just had a job to do
a ritual oft repeated every year.

Tomorrow they would move on to the next camp down the line
once the trucks had moved the cattle from the stand.
but for now the task at hand meant there would be no rest tonight
'till these wild beasts wore the stations owners brand.


Bob Pacey (C)

Re: The Muster

Posted: Fri Jul 17, 2015 9:45 am
by Maureen K Clifford
Good one Bob - your words capture the atmosphere of branding time well - a great poem for Beef Week up there. Just a thought with this line
there would be no torture here or sadness they just had a job to do
a ritual oft repeated every year.
might you consider something like .....

There would be no torture here or sadness, it was just a task

only because you have used the same phrase 'they just had a job to do' in the next verse as well .

Re: The Muster

Posted: Fri Jul 17, 2015 7:45 pm
by Bob Pacey
Hows that sound ?

Bob

Re: The Muster

Posted: Fri Jul 17, 2015 10:25 pm
by Maureen K Clifford
It's better but I still think you need to shorten this line
there would be no torture here or sadness they just had a job to do
to this maybe

there would be no torture here or sadness, just a job to do

Re: The Muster

Posted: Sat Jul 18, 2015 5:35 am
by Bob Pacey
There fixed and it rolls off the tongue better ?



Bob

Re: The Muster

Posted: Sat Jul 18, 2015 11:18 am
by Maureen K Clifford
Perfect - it does indeed roll off the tongue - now go and share it :lol: May I use it in the mag?

Re: The Muster

Posted: Sat Jul 18, 2015 12:47 pm
by Bob Pacey
Sure can Mausie.

Thanks for the suggestions.


Bob

Re: The Muster

Posted: Sat Jul 18, 2015 5:52 pm
by Catherine Lee
Enjoyed this poem Bob it really took me there.

Re: The Muster

Posted: Wed Jul 22, 2015 9:35 am
by Trisha Patterson
Good one Bob. Another take on the prompts.
Trish