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Homework w/e 16/11 - Summer

Posted: Wed Nov 04, 2015 8:38 am
by Wendy Seddon
Summer

When the sun beats hot and dry
Heaven’s orb reigns in the sky,
Everywhere the earth is parched -
Red dust where the bull ants marched.
Endless days of fruit and beer

Tarry as the moths appear.
Hours of idle lethargy
Expending scraps of energy.

So as hoards of mozzies swarm
Entertaining is the norm
Aging yobbos wielding tongs
Grilling chops and righting wrongs.
Under jacarandas blue,
Laughing couples two by two
Languish in the stifling eve
Sensing soon a slight reprieve.

Polka dot bikinis new
In a pleasant yellow hue
Never destined for the water
Could’ve, should’ve, would’ve, oughta.
Hark the bodgie’s tuneless bawl
Emulating dingo’s call.
Damsels slipping, slopping, slapping

Making eyes at surfies strapping.
Yearning for McTavish boards -

Fantasy of Aussie broads
In the midst of countless strugglers
Squeezing into budgie smugglers.
Happily then off to bed

And dream of sunny days ahead
Nearby: coils deterring mozzies
Damp discarded yellow cossies.

Christmas in the Aussie sun
Holy season has begun
Igniting joy and raising cheer
Passage to a brand new year.
Summer

Re: Homework w/e 16/11 - Summer

Posted: Wed Nov 04, 2015 9:58 am
by Maureen K Clifford
WOW - you've captured a typical Aussie beach scene with your words Wendy - dare I say it took me back many years, must have been those bodgies that were lurking in the background in the 60's that did it :lol: They never went ON the beach, that was the surfie's domain. Great use of the prompts in this evocative poem

Re: Homework w/e 16/11 - Summer

Posted: Wed Nov 04, 2015 10:03 am
by Wendy Seddon
Challenged myself to an acrostic!

Re: Homework w/e 16/11 - Summer

Posted: Wed Nov 04, 2015 10:05 pm
by Maureen K Clifford
So you did - I missed it - even better :lol:

Re: Homework w/e 16/11 - Summer

Posted: Thu Nov 05, 2015 9:05 am
by David Campbell
Missed it too, Wendy. I've been sitting here trying to figure out why you split the stanzas as you did, and still didn't see it...you've met the acrostic challenge brilliantly!

Cheers
David

Re: Homework w/e 16/11 - Summer

Posted: Thu Nov 05, 2015 10:43 am
by DollyDot
Hi Wendy

It is brilliant and I can post now and say so as I don't feel so dumb seeing as Maureen and David missed the acrostic. I too was wondering why you split the stanzas. Paints such vivid pictures.

Cheers

Dot

Re: Homework w/e 16/11 - Summer

Posted: Thu Nov 05, 2015 2:43 pm
by Wendy Seddon
HA HA...and here I was thinking it would be obvious - didn't realise I could be subtle! (First time ever!)

Re: Homework w/e 16/11 - Summer

Posted: Thu Nov 05, 2015 2:52 pm
by Catherine Lee
This is really well done Wendy - wonderful pictures, and clever and different with the acrostic.

Re: Homework w/e 16/11 - Summer

Posted: Thu Nov 05, 2015 3:30 pm
by Shelley Hansen
Well done Wendy! I'd better confess and get added to the list - I also missed the acrostic and wondered about the differences in the verses!

Oh dear, I've just judged a small bush poetry competition up this way and there was a poem with stanzas of uneven line numbers in it. In my judge's report I said this puzzled me ... I hope it wasn't an acrostic :o I've posted the poems back now so I can't check! But I don't think it was ... :?

I'm usually so visual too - must pick up my game!!

Very clever of you - take a bow!
Regards
Shelley

Re: Homework w/e 16/11 - Summer

Posted: Thu Nov 05, 2015 7:44 pm
by Neville Briggs
Good one Wendy. Sometimes acrostic writers print the initial letters in heavy type for us unobservant ones :lol: