50 shades of weigh .. a pantoum

[Maureen K Clifford]

A series of quatrains, the second and fourth lines of each stanza repeated as the first and third lines of the next.

Stanza 1 A B C D
Stanza 2 B E D F
Stanza 3 E G F H
Stanza 4 G I H J


50 shades of weigh[ – a Pantoum


Without my glasses when I look
in the mirror – standing there
I see a shapely nubile form
that does not cast me in despair.

In the mirror – standing there
a goddess Reubenesque in shape,
that does not cast me in despair
the first mistake that I did make.

A goddess Reubenesque in shape
with symmetry of female form
the first mistake that I did make
for seems this size is not the norm

With symmetry of female form
to my eyes being somewhat vague
the first mistake that I did make
was Darrell Lea not Jenny Craig.

[Ron]

Certainly a challenge with a difference there Maureen, (the form and rhyming pattern I mean, not the theme! ) and you have created a good laugh with it also. Well done
Good to see that there is a fountain of youth! albeit in the mirror!

Cheers
Ron

[Terry]

Gotta watch that Darrel Lea Maureen.

Looks a bit too tricky for me at the moment.
Make me realize how little I know about this form of poetry.

Terry

[Shelley Hansen]

Well done, Maureen! You've encouraged me to post my pantoum now - you've probably already read it earlier this year in my newsletter eLines.

Cheers
Shelley

[Maureen K Clifford]

Delighted you all seemed to enjoy this and far to late to be watching anything dietary - the damage is done. Thank you all for reading and commenting.

[Catherine Lee]

So enjoyed this, Maureen. Most unexpected - and most relatable!