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Feed my Sheep

Post by manfredvijars » Mon Sep 03, 2012 7:41 pm

An Italian sonnet in iambic pentametre ....

Feed my Sheep
(c) 2006 Manfred Vijars

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Re: Feed my Sheep

Post by william williams » Mon Sep 03, 2012 8:31 pm

An Italian sonnet in iambic pentametre ....

I ain't to sure about that up above realy what it means but it is a very deep thoughtful piece of meaning

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Re: Feed my Sheep

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Mon Sep 03, 2012 8:41 pm

Different Mannie - noice, unusual. and those random acts of kindness usual do benefit the giver as well as the receiver.

A well put prod for us all to be more aware and considerate I am thinking.

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Re: Feed my Sheep

Post by r.magnay » Mon Sep 03, 2012 9:02 pm

...feed your sheep to who?....or whom... 8-)
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Re: Feed my Sheep

Post by Heather » Mon Sep 03, 2012 9:23 pm

Everyone is a person with feelings and story. I especially like the last line Mannie..

Heather :)

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Re: Feed my Sheep

Post by Peely » Mon Sep 03, 2012 11:09 pm

G'day Manfred

It looks more like an English sonnet in rhyming structure to me. The Italian is normally abba abba cde cde or cdc dcd in its most common forms - though there are writers in the past that have varied the rhyming scheme of the final six lines. Apparently, from my source (The Poets Manual and Rhyming Dictionary by Frances Stillman) it is not desirable to finish on a couplet in an Italian sonnet.

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Re: Feed my Sheep

Post by manfredvijars » Tue Sep 04, 2012 2:03 am

Goodonya Peely, the English or Shakespearean sonnet is an adaptation of the Italian model.

Rhyming schemas can be varied.

The octave sets the stage, the volta (in this instance) is in the tenth line but is still at the beginning of the sestet. Finally, the heroic couplet delivers the summation.

I'm pretty sure the piece fits ... :)

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Re: Feed my Sheep

Post by Neville Briggs » Tue Sep 04, 2012 8:28 am

I reckon that rhyming schemes are pretty simple to work out and are mere decoration , not all that important to get technically ' correct' whatever that means. I think getting too concerned about rhyming is like trying to determine the brand of paint Leonardo used for painting the Mona Lisa. Doesn't really matter, the Mona Lisa is a masterpiece whether he used Dulux or Taubmans. ;) :roll:

I reckon the important feature of the sonnet is that it is a measured argument and I think Manfred has achieved this. ( he might have the injunction to feed the sheep slightly out of context ;) :) )

One of the most celebrated sonnets in the English tradition is Ozymandias by Shelley, and that is certainly a measured argument..
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Re: Feed my Sheep

Post by Glenny Palmer » Tue Sep 04, 2012 9:46 am

[quote="Neville Briggs"] ( he might have the injunction to feed the sheep slightly out of context ;) :) )
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...maybe he was being 'biblical'?....I'm told it often occurs during hangovers....(nice but...I like it.)
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