The Cow In The Garden

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The Cow In The Garden

Post by Heather » Thu Dec 31, 2015 4:12 pm

Last one for the year. True story.


Enjoy your New Year BBQs everyone!

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Re: The Cow In The Garden

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Thu Dec 31, 2015 5:44 pm

How could you :( She loved you, just wanted to be close and left her gifts to replenish your gardens soil. Oh Willow, poor Willow.....
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Re: The Cow In The Garden

Post by Heather » Thu Dec 31, 2015 5:48 pm

I'm sure she went to a good home Maureen - she was ripe for breeding. God help whoever bought her she was a bitch of a cow.

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Re: The Cow In The Garden

Post by Neville Briggs » Fri Jan 01, 2016 9:10 am

:lol: I like it. Well done Heather, straight to the point and good concise wording :)

She's gone to a far, far better place :lol:
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Re: The Cow In The Garden

Post by Cropduster » Fri Jan 01, 2016 9:30 am

Not sure if it was Willow's rump for dinner I just ate
But it was thick, and it was juicy, and it hung over the plate.

:D

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Re: The Cow In The Garden

Post by Heather » Fri Jan 01, 2016 9:36 am

Thanks Neville, it's old one brought to life and I had a bit of fun writing it. Got to go back and fix the glitch now I know it is there though - and the metre changes (did I get away with that?) because I had several original ideas and liked the ending and couldn't ditch it.

Probably not Allan - she'd be getting bit old by now!

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Re: The Cow In The Garden

Post by Neville Briggs » Fri Jan 01, 2016 11:04 am

There's nothing to " get away with " as if you did something wrong. It works fine. As far as I know there is no poetic "rule" that says you can't vary the verse for effect. So I guess it depends on whether any variation looks like a mistake or a deliberate effect. This doesn't look like a mistake to me. ;)
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Re: The Cow In The Garden

Post by Heather » Fri Jan 01, 2016 11:14 am

Quite deliberate Neville, quite deliberate and nice to have a bit of writing time. I'm going through some old ideas and notes and trying to squeeze something out of them. I kept thinking of Kym as I wrote this one as I know she would have made a 20 stanza rollicking yarn out of this one - but I'm too lazy! :lol:

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