The Handpiece made of Glass

[Maureen K Clifford]

How come you decided against putting it into a comp Marty? IMO it has an edge to the story that most folks wouldn't have come from with a nice punch line and I reckon it would certainly hold it's own. Love it

Cheers

Maureen

[Bob Pacey]

Their loss our gain Martin my man !!!


Another good yard and a real good punch line as Maureen said.


Will have another read tonight when I finish this bloody garden.


Bob

[manfredvijars]

Great use of metaphor there Marty - well done!! ...

[Neville Briggs]

Well done Marty. Good one for the performance if not the comp.

[Vic Jefferies]

Great poem Marty! This one would not be out of place in any anthology of bush poetry that I have ever read. Would certainly hold its own in any comp, but I am like you I don't like comps either.

Vic

[Jeff Thorpe]

Good one Marty. I agree with Neville - it would really sound tops as a performance.

Cheers, Jeff

[Kym]

Great poem Marty. I remember watching my dad and grandad shearing, the smell of the wool, the sound of the buzzing clippers and the clippety clop of sharp hooves on the wooden slat floor ... thanks for bringing back those special memories.

[Bob Pacey]

Yeah I was gonna say your metre is all over the place and the silly bell count is out as well.


I would say that you should never enter a comp Marty and that means the rest of us mug writers would have a better chance.




Good onya mate.


Bob

[warooa]

It's a cracker of a poem, Marty . . . and even if you have a change of heart you can still chuck your hat in the ring with it.

Cheers, Marty

[Irene]

Loved it Marty - but felt very sorry for the poor old man!! What a shame they had to blow his cover!!! Let him hold his wayward dreams, I say!!

Thanks for sharing

Catchya
IRene