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September Sky

Posted: Wed Sep 19, 2012 9:01 am
by warooa
Probably quite difficult to convey this. Living in the tropics it's commonly said that we don't have the standard 4 seasons but just the two - Wet and Dry. But every year I see a sky that marks that changing of the seasons and it's only around for a few weeks. It's subtle but unmistakable . . .

September Sky

©M. Pattie 2012

The season’s told the sky, it seems;
the rising sun’s an ember.
There’s something new amidst the blue
that tells us it’s September.

It’s deep, but sometimes smokey grey;
can shimmer or rescind.
No vestige for the monsoon or
a hostage to the wind.

It opens up and spreads its wings;
Reflects a turquoise glow.
I love it; my September sky;
it puts on such a show.

Torresian Imperials;
not seen since early March.
They seem to bring the start of Spring,
they dip and dive and arch.

The percolated cirrus mats,
the sunset starts to splinter.
The season turns and quickly burns
the final throws of winter.

A coda to the ether of
the season that’s passed by.
It’s vast, unique, exudes mystique;
that sweet September sky.

Re: September Sky

Posted: Wed Sep 19, 2012 9:52 am
by mummsie
Very nice Marty, gives us a glimpse of the "softer" Marty :)

Cheers
Sue

Re: September Sky

Posted: Wed Sep 19, 2012 9:59 am
by Maureen K Clifford
Inside every rough diamond a poetic heart :lol: :lol: This is beautiful Marty - truly beautiful. Thank you

Cheers

Maureen

Re: September Sky

Posted: Wed Sep 19, 2012 10:10 am
by keats
No verse about the Football finals? Then what's it got to do with September, Marty???
:?: :)

Sunny Neil

Re: September Sky

Posted: Wed Sep 19, 2012 10:26 am
by Neville Briggs
That's fantastic Marty. Well done.

( I don't think you need the last stanza. Resist the urge to explain, your poem already explains it well enough . Have faith. ;) ;) )

Re: September Sky

Posted: Wed Sep 19, 2012 10:36 am
by keats
Actually I loved the last stanza

A coda to the ether of
the season that’s passed by.
It’s vast, unique, exudes mystique;
that sweet September sky.


but would probably change it to

The code of the Season
AFL's near has passed
It’s vast, unique, exudes mystique;
and kicks the Rugby's ar*e (not a proper rhyme, but put it in for Nev ;) )

Re: September Sky

Posted: Wed Sep 19, 2012 10:42 am
by Irene
Beautiful imagery Marty!
There is something about the seasons that stirs the soul, isn't there?
And beautiful observations in the most mundane - if you care to look!!
Thanks for sharing.

Catchya
IRene

Re: September Sky

Posted: Wed Sep 19, 2012 11:42 am
by Heather
That's lovely Marty. I'm sorry I missed it.

Heather :)

Re: September Sky

Posted: Wed Sep 19, 2012 12:07 pm
by Terry
That's a great poem Marty and I wouldn't change anything.

Cheers Terry

Re: September Sky

Posted: Wed Sep 19, 2012 7:11 pm
by Dennis N O'Brien
Good one.