The Promise of Spring

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Heather

The Promise of Spring

Post by Heather » Tue Oct 01, 2013 10:17 pm

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Terry
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Re: The Promise of Spring

Post by Terry » Tue Oct 01, 2013 10:26 pm

Hi Heather

Only a few lines but it says it all.

Terry
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Heather

Re: The Promise of Spring

Post by Heather » Tue Oct 01, 2013 10:33 pm

Thanks Terry, I've lost confidence in my writing and it means a lot that you would take the time to comment.

I've been trying to write the same or similar scene in different ways - just as a bit of an exercise to see which would sound the best. It's an exercise for the brain. This kinda sprang from that mucking about.

Heather :)
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Re: The Promise of Spring

Post by Robyn » Tue Oct 01, 2013 10:50 pm

It's good Heather... paints a picture in a few words.
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Re: The Promise of Spring

Post by Bob Pacey » Wed Oct 02, 2013 12:03 am

I found it interesting that you describe winter as a male and spring as female ? was this deliberate ?

Most times Mother nature is described as all female ??

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Re: The Promise of Spring

Post by warooa » Wed Oct 02, 2013 5:42 am

Must be a bloke thing, Bob cos that jumped out at me too. But I do like it - it suits.

Keep "mucking about" Heather . . you never know what might pop out :)

Cheers, Marty
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Heather

Re: The Promise of Spring

Post by Heather » Wed Oct 02, 2013 10:38 am

Thanks Robyn. It's something at least.

I don't know Bob, some things just seem to take on their own personality and winter seems like a "he" to me - that bit kinda wrote itself so it must be subconscious.. My apple tree is definitely a lady. The Grim Reaper is a "he".

Thanks Marty. :)
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Re: The Promise of Spring

Post by Neville Briggs » Thu Oct 03, 2013 8:25 am

Excellent work Heather. You've done well, you are learning how to see poetically.
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Re: The Promise of Spring

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Thu Oct 03, 2013 9:06 am

Heather! :o Why on earth would you lose confidence with your writing????? :shock: Girlfriend - what the hell are you thinking. :? You write great poetry and shouldn't doubt yourself for a minute. Get off your butt girly and get writing. This poem is delightful - now go find the others :lol:
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Re: The Promise of Spring

Post by Heather » Thu Oct 03, 2013 10:16 am

Thanks Neville. I see everything poetically - putting it into words is the hard bit.

Marty spring is bright, pretty, full of flowers and new life, daffodils, baby lambs, yellow light on the tips of the trees - very feminine - there is a renewal of nature. I guess winter is the opposite to that so that makes it a "he". :)

Maureen, I don't write as good as I want to and probably never will.

Thanks for your kind words. I really appreciate that you have all taken the time to comment.

Heather :)
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