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Wonders of The lagoon

Posted: Thu May 08, 2014 12:45 pm
by mummsie
I revisited an old one today and thought I'd share
Wonders of the lagoon

Sue Pearce © 2012

Beneath the shade of willow trees
your gentle waters glisten, tease
and beckon wild geese "join me please,
come rest your weary wings".

Such solitude and peace you bring
‘neath trees now lush with growth of spring.
caressing in the shade they bring
a yen to linger here.

The dewdrops of the early morn
like silver beads they cling, adorn
the vein like growth of ferns, newborn
to natures wondrous ways.

Soft ripples form and spread they grow,
what wonders do they hide below?
through dappled shadows I’ll not know,
your secrets safe from me.

Then from nowhere a soft breeze sings
a mellow sigh and with it brings
sheer gossamer, elusive wings
of dragon flies at play.

Where native swans, soft feathers preen
and swamp frog’s chorus intervene
on mornings stillness- so serene,
resplendent in each way.

As twilight heralds end of day
the full moons shadows softly play
while opalescent beams display
a tranquil, peaceful scene.

Re: Wonders of The lagoon

Posted: Thu May 08, 2014 1:32 pm
by Neville Briggs
Well done Sue. :) I like that, a good creation of mood.

Re: Wonders of The lagoon

Posted: Thu May 08, 2014 4:15 pm
by alongtimegone
That's lovely Sue.
wazza

Re: Wonders of The lagoon

Posted: Thu May 08, 2014 8:18 pm
by Maureen K Clifford
That's beautiful Sue - really like it and the 4th line of each verse breaks it nicely

Re: Wonders of The lagoon

Posted: Fri May 09, 2014 7:55 am
by Rod Walford
YES!! :D

Re: Wonders of The lagoon

Posted: Fri May 09, 2014 9:15 am
by mummsie
Thank you all, your comments are appreciated.
Sue

Re: Wonders of The lagoon

Posted: Fri May 09, 2014 2:01 pm
by Bob Pacey
Yes Sue it paint a picture that you can see.

The second line in the second verse seems a little out of place for me.


maybe drop the "neath and

use trees are lush with growth it's spring


Just a thought

Cheers Bob

Re: Wonders of The lagoon

Posted: Fri May 09, 2014 2:14 pm
by mummsie
Thanks Bob for the comment and the suggestion but I think I willl stick with the original, just sounds better to me. :)
Good on ya
Sue

Re: Wonders of The lagoon

Posted: Fri May 09, 2014 6:04 pm
by Terry
G/day Sue,
Lovely words.

Terry

Re: Wonders of The lagoon

Posted: Fri May 09, 2014 6:52 pm
by mummsie
Good on ya Terry

Sue