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Post by **manfredvijars** » Sat Jun 13, 2015 8:47 am

Allan, here's the example ...

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(c) 2010 Manfred Vijars

Cropduster · Post by **Cropduster** » Sat Jun 13, 2015 9:37 am

Thanks Manny

So beautiful, so poignant, so heartfelt...and so wonderfully crafted.

Your work is a joy to read.

David Campbell · Post by **David Campbell** » Sat Jun 13, 2015 10:05 pm

Beautifully written, Manfred, with a very interesting structure.

Cheers
David

Post by **manfredvijars** » Sat Jun 13, 2015 10:16 pm

Thanks Allan, David.
Was actually an exercise in enjambment.
The piece has perfect rhyme and metre, yet, when read according to the punctuation, the rhyming should not be obvious ...

Terry · Post by **Terry** » Sun Jun 14, 2015 7:47 pm

Yes Beautifully written Manfred

Terry

Maureen K Clifford · Post by **Maureen K Clifford** » Sun Jun 14, 2015 10:52 pm

you have the magic touch Manny

Post by **Shelley Hansen** » Sun Jun 14, 2015 11:15 pm

Manfred, that is exquisite. Like David, I'm really taken by the structure. Enjambment is one of my favourite poetry tools and you've used it so effectively here.

Aside from the techo stuff - the sentiments are truly poignant and tug at the heartstrings.

Poems don't have to be long to make an impact. Yours proves it.

Cheers, Shelley

Post by **manfredvijars** » Mon Jun 15, 2015 6:49 am

Thank you for your kind words Shelley, Mausey and Terry.
The piece was about my best Mate.
We were together for a number of years, she was suffering a bit towards the end.
So, sadly I had to call the vet in ...

Stephen Whiteside · Post by **Stephen Whiteside** » Mon Jun 15, 2015 12:12 pm

Yes, I love it too, Manfred.

Post by **manfredvijars** » Mon Jun 15, 2015 12:27 pm

Praise indeed, thank you Stephen ...

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