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Alone
Posted: Sat Jun 13, 2015 8:47 am
by manfredvijars
Allan, here's the example ...
Alone
(c) 2010 Manfred Vijars
Re: Alone
Posted: Sat Jun 13, 2015 9:37 am
by Cropduster
Thanks Manny
So beautiful, so poignant, so heartfelt...and so wonderfully crafted.
Your work is a joy to read.
Re: Alone
Posted: Sat Jun 13, 2015 10:05 pm
by David Campbell
Beautifully written, Manfred, with a very interesting structure.
Cheers
David
Re: Alone
Posted: Sat Jun 13, 2015 10:16 pm
by manfredvijars
Thanks Allan, David.
Was actually an exercise in enjambment.
The piece has perfect rhyme and metre, yet, when read according to the punctuation, the rhyming should not be obvious ...
Re: Alone
Posted: Sun Jun 14, 2015 7:47 pm
by Terry
Yes Beautifully written Manfred
Terry
Re: Alone
Posted: Sun Jun 14, 2015 10:52 pm
by Maureen K Clifford
you have the magic touch Manny
Re: Alone
Posted: Sun Jun 14, 2015 11:15 pm
by Shelley Hansen
Manfred, that is exquisite. Like David, I'm really taken by the structure. Enjambment is one of my favourite poetry tools and you've used it so effectively here.
Aside from the techo stuff - the sentiments are truly poignant and tug at the heartstrings.
Poems don't have to be long to make an impact. Yours proves it.
Cheers, Shelley
Re: Alone
Posted: Mon Jun 15, 2015 6:49 am
by manfredvijars
Thank you for your kind words Shelley, Mausey and Terry.
The piece was about my best Mate.
We were together for a number of years, she was suffering a bit towards the end.
So, sadly I had to call the vet in ...
Re: Alone
Posted: Mon Jun 15, 2015 12:12 pm
by Stephen Whiteside
Yes, I love it too, Manfred.
Re: Alone
Posted: Mon Jun 15, 2015 12:27 pm
by manfredvijars
Praise indeed, thank you Stephen ...
