Tomorrow Is A Promise

[Ron]

Enjoyed it heather, good one.

Ron

[Bob Pacey]

I like the original layout better.


Bob

[Heather]

Thanks Ron.

Why Bob?

[alongtimegone]

Wow ... loved it Heather.
Wazza

[David Campbell]

I'm with Bob. The first version is stronger because the layout emphasises the repetition. "gossip in the air" and "wisdom of the moon" might be whimsical, but "it's the ink upon the nib" (the promise of more than one poem in the next six months?) and "it's a yesterday's disguise" go deeper than that.

David

[Heather]

Thanks Wazza, so glad to get the "wow" factor.

Hopefully David, hopefully.

Ok, so I'm deeper than I thought I was! I think the people I'm associating with are starting to rub off on me.

[Bob Pacey]

yeah I think it has a better effect.

bob

[Heather]

Thanks Bob. (That's just so you know I read your comment)

[Catherine Lee]

Loving this Heather - it totally came across as thought provoking to me. Poems like this make me want to read them several times over - and slower each time. Well done!

[David Campbell]

Just to clarify...by "first version" I meant the one at the beginning of the thread.

David