My Secret Recipe

[Heather]

This is one of my really early poems - I'd been writing about 6mths and it is all over the shop technically. Due for a re-write but I thought I'd share it to show I wasn't always perfect! At the time we had all written poems to do with recipes or cooking and it was a lot of fun.

[Bob Pacey]

Bob he cooks with microwave cause time is short ya know
he can even nuke and egg although it starts to really glow.
But when it comes to leftovers there is so much he can do
but hold your nose and gulp it down or it will make ya spew.


just to help ya out.


Bob

[alongtimegone]

Doesn't need much rewriting Heather. Reads great (or to be more grammatically correct a great read ). It's not easy to make a really good sponge cake so keep that secret secret.
Wazza

[Terry]

Well you now know my recipe Heather, guess you're going to have to write another Stanza.

You're eight, writing fun poems occassionally can be fun and there's no need to try and match the old masters either.

Looks like the cooking theme has taken off again.

Cheers Terry

[Maureen K Clifford]

Well remember doing these poems and they were such fun. Leonies chocolate pud in a mug is to die for and my Lemonade scones still find favour MKR at ABPA

[Neville Briggs]

it is all over the shop technically

I don't think so. The only thing you might want to do is look at how you could vary the constant sameness of the metre.

It's great fun that you have revisited these earlier pieces. I remember Heather Searles
piece about drinking the rum instead of putting it in the pudding she hasn't performed that piece for a while, must remind her.

[Heather]

I actually made Evan's fruit cake and it was so easy and absolutely delicious.

It's an old poem Neville. The bits that stand to me as wrong are the lines that have feminine endings - if I didn't know better it wouldn't matter. There's a difference in a poem that is written for a bit of fun and one you want to put into a written comp. It will probably stay the way it is. Once you start to fiddle with things you lose the essence of it. Such is life.

Heather

[Maureen K Clifford]

But essence comes in a bottle Heather If you run out Woolies have some

I agree re Evans fruitcake - I make it all the time - easy peasy and delicious

[warooa]

Yeah lots you could include . . . one of Manfred's vodka recipes, Terry's stew and any of Wazza's seafood stuff.

[Heather]

There's a recipe for the vodka? I thought it went straight from the bottle to the mouth (by-passing even the glass).