Homework !4/4/2016 ' The Feather and the Fly'

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Homework !4/4/2016 ' The Feather and the Fly'

Post by Terry » Sun Apr 10, 2016 11:24 pm

A last minute rush job Maureen


The Feather and the Fly.

He rests there on a log awhile, next to a trickling brook,
while carefully inspecting there a tiny feathered hook.
The flybox resting on his knee is full of hand tied flies,
so cunningly constructed, they could fool most untrained eyes.

They represent the flylife and the insects found nearby,
though only fur and feather you may think that they could fly.
Long hours spent at the fly-vice and a lifetime on the stream,
has taught a skill that few possess and most can only dream.

A trout is rising in the pool – he deftly casts his fly,
It lands there gently on the brook and drifts towards the lie.
A sip - the fly is taken – then a pause – the fish is on,
he brings it to the net - removes the hook - the trout is gone.

© T.E. Piggott
Last edited by Terry on Mon Apr 11, 2016 10:39 pm, edited 1 time in total.

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Re: Homework !4/4/2016 ' The Feather and the Fly'

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Mon Apr 11, 2016 12:23 pm

Love it Terry - a different path again to the others submitted..we all have such a wonderfully different view on life that leads in so many different directions. I would never have thought of those prompts leading in this direction but there you go - plenty of diversity on this site. Well done.
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Re: Homework !4/4/2016 ' The Feather and the Fly'

Post by Catherine Lee » Mon Apr 11, 2016 6:04 pm

Delightful poem Terry !

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Re: Homework !4/4/2016 ' The Feather and the Fly'

Post by Terry » Mon Apr 11, 2016 6:15 pm

Thanks Maureen and Catherine.

The second last lines a bit dodgy - will fix it when I get a bit of time.

Cheers

Terry

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Re: Homework !4/4/2016 ' The Feather and the Fly'

Post by Terry » Mon Apr 11, 2016 10:39 pm

There Fixed

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Re: Homework !4/4/2016 ' The Feather and the Fly'

Post by Bob Pacey » Tue Apr 12, 2016 12:36 pm

When you mentioned you did not like the last bit I thought !


A sip - the fly is taken – then a pause – the trout is on,
he brings it to the net - removes the hook - it's gone.


Bob
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After you grasp that everything else seems insignificant !!!

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Re: Homework !4/4/2016 ' The Feather and the Fly'

Post by Terry » Tue Apr 12, 2016 7:16 pm

G/day Bob

the poem was written in a rush to beat the cut off time.

The second last line was out of rhythm.

Cheers

Terry

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