homework we 6/06/16 - The Cruise.
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homework we 6/06/16 - The Cruise.
The Cruise
My friend has hit the big six-o
and thought it would be cool
to take a cruise across the globe
and ask her friends from school.
Now cruising’s not my favourite thing,
can think of nothing worse!
But, she’s a mate – I’ll make the leap
and stifle every curse.
She said there’s entertainment
and fine dining that’s the best,
But how can I go dancing when
I’m stuffed in safety vest?
Ships are on the water where
they rock and roll and pitch!
“Wen, you will get used to it.”
she said, she’s such a mate.
I argue it’s not needed
we can celebrate ashore!
But still she sent my ticket
and would hear of nothing more.
My friend has hit the big six-o
and thought it would be cool
to take a cruise across the globe
and ask her friends from school.
Now cruising’s not my favourite thing,
can think of nothing worse!
But, she’s a mate – I’ll make the leap
and stifle every curse.
She said there’s entertainment
and fine dining that’s the best,
But how can I go dancing when
I’m stuffed in safety vest?
Ships are on the water where
they rock and roll and pitch!
“Wen, you will get used to it.”
she said, she’s such a mate.
I argue it’s not needed
we can celebrate ashore!
But still she sent my ticket
and would hear of nothing more.
Wen de Rhymewriter There is nothing mundane about the ordinary.
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Re: homework we 6/06/16 - The Cruise.
Hi Wendy
Someone we know went on a cruise and described it as "taking a holiday in a shopping mall". (I like your 'rhyme' for "pitch"!)
Cheers
David
Someone we know went on a cruise and described it as "taking a holiday in a shopping mall". (I like your 'rhyme' for "pitch"!)
Cheers
David
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Re: homework we 6/06/16 - The Cruise.
Well David, a holiday in a shopping mall sounds good to me - maybe I will enjoy it after all!
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Re: homework we 6/06/16 - The Cruise.
Good go at the homework Wendy.


It's well known that Wendy is a lady of suitable decorum.David Campbell wrote:(I like your 'rhyme' for "pitch"!)


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Re: homework we 6/06/16 - The Cruise.
Definitely felt the rocking and rolling as I read this, Wendy - nearly had to go and take a seasickness pill!
Very good!
Cheers
Shelley

Very good!
Cheers
Shelley
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Re: homework we 6/06/16 - The Cruise.
Mate v Pitch threw me as well
but eventually I got it. Such refinement
is nice to see. Great use of the prompts Wen.



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