Homework 20.02.17

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Homework 20.02.17

Post by DollyDot » Mon Feb 13, 2017 1:28 pm

More is Less © Dot Church 2017

I sit, the rain is falling from above.
It brings the scent of grass I always love.
The hills above are cloaked in hallowed cloud;
the rain falls softly from its watery shroud.

Winding back the clock I ponder childhood days;
I yearn for all the good old ways.
We ran without our shoes and little clothes
It was fun: to do just as we chose!

Time waits for no woman but at what cost?
So many pleasures yet so many lost!
Disposing of the memories, the fire I recall,
none could relocate the warmth, there for all.

Windows ajar just like the timber door;
but now with trepidation bolts galore.
Nets for sleeping, kept the mossies at bay,
and thus, I felt safe all tucked away!

No telly then, with its invasive gloom;
radio came gently to our room.
To bath then with Sunlight soap,
in winter, no hot water, but we’d cope.

Sadly, in our move from simple life
we lost our precious values, causing strife.
In the city, some feel oh so swank
for they recycle water in a tank.

Though I love these things and reminisce
and dream of times and memories I miss,
I am still to microwave the dinner yet,
pay bills online, to keep us free of debt.

Gran would love to see how we live now
TVs, computers, i-phones, she would wonder how.
As I watch the rain fall from the sky
More is Less and I ponder why!

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Re: Homework 20.02.17

Post by Shelley Hansen » Mon Feb 13, 2017 8:10 pm

Oh, so true, Dot! I suppose every generation has longed for the "good old days" but probably we're the first generation to have seen to much change, so rapidly ... and not all of it for the better.

Love this bit:
In the city, some feel oh so swank
for they recycle water in a tank.
How innovative they are these days!!!! ;)

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Re: Homework 20.02.17

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Wed Feb 15, 2017 11:02 am

Great use of the prompts Dot - good to see you again on this page ;) Loved the reference to Sunlight soap - wasn't that a marvellous product - it did all of your cleaning, unlike the cupboard full of expensive chemicals that we have today. We should all consider going back to it - our purses would benefit. What else can you use to bathe the kids, wash your hair, do the dishes and the laundry, remove stains ,kill ants and even help with acne.
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Re: Homework 20.02.17

Post by DollyDot » Wed Feb 15, 2017 4:57 pm

Thanks Shelley!

Yeah Maureen Sunlight is good and you can still buy it. Good if you don't like highly perfumed stuff.
I need to be to be more disciplined with my writing as I still struggle with the metre. I love watching what happens on here though.

Thanks to you both!

Cheers Dot

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Re: Homework 20.02.17

Post by Wendy Seddon » Wed Feb 15, 2017 8:49 pm

Nice one Dot, just have to use the word swank now!
Wen de Rhymewriter There is nothing mundane about the ordinary.

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