Thanks David. I'd have loved to have entered it in an open comp and have hung on to it all this time (nearly 3 years) with that in mind - BUT, when I approached one competition and told them it had won an emerging section it was all too difficult for them to decide if it was eligible for the open section of their comp so it wasn't allowed. Secondly, in my ignorance I allowed it on a website which means it is published - so there are very few places left for me to put it now so after nearly 3 years I've let it go.
Why did I decide to add the two lines? The poem is in two parts if you like - the battlefields and back home. I thought the last two lines ended it on a sad and reflective note and represent the sadness and loss to the family.
When I read it I almost do the last two lines in a whisper. The bits about the battlefield I read louder. It's a poem I like to present using my voice to convey the emotion.
Heather
