Homework 23/05/16 Angela Gaye

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Homework 23/05/16 Angela Gaye

Post by Wendy Seddon » Thu May 12, 2016 11:56 am

Angela Gaye

My tears are out of control
they turn to rain in my heart
the love there that’s sleeping
while I’m softly weeping -
life ended before it could start.
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Re: Homework 23/05/16 Angela Gaye

Post by David Campbell » Thu May 12, 2016 12:46 pm

So few words, Wendy, yet they say so much.

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Re: Homework 23/05/16 Angela Gaye

Post by Neville Briggs » Thu May 12, 2016 1:00 pm

That's good Wendy, I always think that to do the most with the least is one of the main principles of any art.
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Re: Homework 23/05/16 Angela Gaye

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Thu May 12, 2016 2:19 pm

Oh my! The heartbreak is tangible ... nothing more needed to be said.
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Re: Homework 23/05/16 Angela Gaye

Post by mummsie » Thu May 12, 2016 4:47 pm

:cry:
the door is always open, the kettles always on, my shoulders here to cry on, i'll not judge who's right or wrong.
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Re: Homework 23/05/16 Angela Gaye

Post by Shelley Hansen » Thu May 12, 2016 9:30 pm

Beautifully poignant, Wendy. Proof that a poem need not be long to be memorable.

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Re: Homework 23/05/16 Angela Gaye

Post by Heather » Fri May 13, 2016 11:18 am

Yep. What they said Wendy.

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Re: Homework 23/05/16 Angela Gaye

Post by Catherine Lee » Mon May 16, 2016 1:15 am

I totally agree - so few words and yet they speak volumes. Lovely poem Wendy x
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Re: Homework 23/05/16 Angela Gaye

Post by alongtimegone » Tue May 17, 2016 9:18 am

Me too Wendy. Short but not sweet. You've captured in those four lines the sadness of relationships that set us adrift for a time. Thankfully we usually make it into port somewhere along the way.
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