The Poem I Left At Home

[Zondrae]

Illawarra Breakfast Poets set a topic every week for our 'homework' poem.
One week, in spite of completing my poem, I left it at home. This, in itself, became a topic for a poem.

The Poem I Left At Home
Zondrae King (Corrimal) 11/08

If only one of you have seen
the poem I left at home.
It was my greatest triumph yet;
it was my greatest tome.

The dialogue and narrative
were music to the ears.
This magical soliloquy
was way above it’s peers.

Such perfect punctuation there,
when peppered ‘cross the page,
revealed a plot with logic, oh
so real at every stage.

I used alliteration well,
with subtlety and grace
and at the end the passion! Oh!
The tears ran down my face.

As I applied each metaphor
with skill and perfect scance
the similes came rolling in
each stanza to enhance.

Employing iambs carefully
the odd trochaic too,
created perfect metre and
the story was true blue.

A tale of horse and hero on
the hunt for some romance.
The climax had a brutal twist.
The villain had no chance.

Like verse from old Will Shakespeare
it could have stood the test.
If not devoured by the dog,
it might have been my best.


(Maybe not my best poem - but it was fun to write... and it was 2008) I see a slip in metre - particularly in the final stanza.. oh well I hope I am still learning.

[Neville Briggs]

very inventive Zondrae

[Maureen K Clifford]

How come it's always the dog that gets the blame? - whose a naughty boy then even the RACQ ad blames the dog...so unfair

Obviously though a dog with good taste who knew when he was on a good thing he should stick to it. Good poem Zondrae

Cheers

Maureen

[Heather]

A good fun poem Zondrae. Enjoyed it.

Heather

[Zondrae]

Thanks ladies,

I was trying to be both informative and funny. I did leave the homework home that Wednesday. I've done it twice in nearly 4 years. Not too bad for an old chook.

[Terry]

Hi Zondrae,
I agree an entertaining and fun poem, it's a bit like that brilliant idea you get but haven't a pen or paper handy.
Then like a puff of smoke it's gone, another masterpiece lost forever.

Terry

[Bob Pacey]

Zondrae sometimes even when you do funny you sound serious and that in itself can be funny.
Now I've confused myself.

No offence Just the way I think.



Bob

[Zondrae]

Thanks boys,

I try. Sometimes a bit too hard.

[Bob Pacey]

Yeah Wayne told me you can be vveerryy trying at times.


Yes Dear.


Bob