Red Taffy - Waiting

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manfredvijars

Red Taffy - Waiting

Post by manfredvijars » Wed Apr 30, 2014 9:24 am

Red Taffy - Waiting
© 2014 Manfred Vijars
Last edited by manfredvijars on Wed Jun 08, 2016 11:57 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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Vic Jefferies
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Re: Red Taffy - Waiting

Post by Vic Jefferies » Wed Apr 30, 2014 9:44 am

Great poem Manfred!
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Re: Red Taffy - Waiting

Post by manfredvijars » Wed Apr 30, 2014 9:47 am

Thanks Vic, it's actually a lyric, so still a tad rough ... :)
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Re: Red Taffy - Waiting

Post by Ron » Wed Apr 30, 2014 10:40 am

Enjoyed that Manfred, well done! :)
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Re: Red Taffy - Waiting

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Wed Apr 30, 2014 2:05 pm

I thought it sounded lyrical - can't wait to hear the finished product - is sounds good ( in my head) I hear and the band played Waltzing Matilda
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Re: Red Taffy - Waiting

Post by Neville Briggs » Wed Apr 30, 2014 8:30 pm

And each stanza is four lines of accentual tetrameter followed by one line of accentual trimeter. :geek: ;)

An heroic yarn. :)
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manfredvijars

Re: Red Taffy - Waiting

Post by manfredvijars » Wed Apr 30, 2014 10:45 pm

Whatevaaah .... :D
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Heather

Re: Red Taffy - Waiting

Post by Heather » Thu May 01, 2014 1:31 pm

I watched the program on the war horses the other night - they made a huge contribution and suffered terribly. So sad that most didn't get to go home. Good one Manfred.

Heather :)
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