The Gun

[Vic Jefferies]

Great yarn and well written Marty!

Vic

[Maureen K Clifford]

Yes I also think it is a great yarn and well written - found a typo you might want to fix- he made the combs sing through and with your punctuation " and " indicating speech they only need to be at beginning and the ending of the talking part, not each sentence, and the punctuation overall needs a bit of spit and polish, ( I know picky, picky) but this is really good and I would hate you to maybe loose out on a comp or some such just because you had these wrongly placed.

Read it again and it is good.

Cheers

Maureen

[Heather]

It's great Marty. Really great! You are improving no end lately. I reckon spit and polish and into a comp too.

Heather

[Heather]

I KNEW it was snowing somewhere today! So, so cold here too. I think Melbourne was expecting a top of 11 degrees. Reckon it was about to snow in Kilmore this afternoon - sky as black as slate and air so cold it hurt to breathe.

Heather

[Bob Pacey]

Ah you poor buggers it got to a low 22 degrees today even had kids in the pool. all the victorians with their number plates Victoria The Place To Be and they are all up here.



Bob

[Heather]

Snowing in Ballarat today. Knew it...

[Bob Pacey]

Never seen snow oh well i did get a bit of white stuff come out of the fridge when I left the door ajar overnight.


Not long now Heather better bring your kini.


Bob

[Heather]

Bob respectable ladies who have had four chidren do not own "Kinis" thank you.

Take it to the weather forum now Bobbo!

[Heather]

It's brilliant Marty. Not many longish poems keep my attention but this one did. (Still got to get back to you on this one but been a tad busy).

Heather

[David J Delaney]

This is a beauty Marty, love it eh!