The Sound of Gold

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The Sound of Gold

Post by worddancer » Tue Feb 14, 2012 5:36 pm

Hi everyone, I haven't been here for a while, so please forgive me and enjoy this bush dance. :)

Inspired by Terry Piggott, and his awesome life in the bush as he gathers inspiration for his equally brilliant poetry.
Thank you Terry,

THE PROSPECTOR:


He packs his tack in a great canvas sack
And then drives away in his car.
Nobody cries as they wave their goodbyes;
They will await his return from afar.
When he reaches the track he will find his way back
With his GPS tuned to a star.

The story is told how he travels the road
With constant anticipation,
He ignores the snakes as he hammers in stakes,
On the boundary of his location
This man has gone bush, and he shows no rush
To return to civilisation.

This modern-gold seeker, with a stick and a beeper
That creates echoes to his ears from the ground.
On his own, he unpacks his gear from his sacks,
He’s left family and friends in the town.
Now the bush replaces their loving embraces
With an encompassing sky and a peaceful surround.

The look on his face shows nary a trace
Of emotion as he unpacks his gear.
He sets up his camp, and primes his lamp,
Lights fire, and watches a dingo draw near.
Staring into the embers, he starts to remember
Other campsites like the one he has here.

He wakes in the morning, stretching and yawning
With limbs stiff and cold as the ground.
His muscles will strengthen as the days lengthen
While he walks the grid; listening to sounds.
Bright are his eyes, as he unearths the prize
His detector signals it there to be found.

When his eyes behold the nugget of gold
As he digs in the earth for this prize
They sparkle and shine as he takes out his twine,
Knotted, for measurement of size.
The tail of his shirt removes unwanted dirt
And hessian covers rock from prying eyes

As he looks to the ground; there is more to be found!
Shards that catch the bright setting sun.
He puts some in a pot, then marks this fine spot,
So he can find it again when he’s done.
For the task of recording his find in the morning,
He must leave; he feels he should run.

From the past he has learned, he knows he’ll return
After the assayer sees what's in his pot and his sack.
There is quiet celebration, with this revelation
As he phones his partner to say she should pack.
They both go to sign on the dotted line,
Then together they travel the track back.

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Re: The Sound of Gold

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Tue Feb 14, 2012 9:16 pm

sorry Eliza :lol: :oops: this line cracked me up
As he extracts his bones from the ground.
I know what you meant but think maybe you could have another look at it- you make Terry sound like someone on a Zombie walk :lol: :lol: The day of the living dead perhaps

Perhaps something along the lines of -

He wakes in the morning, stretching and yawning
Limbs stiff from sleeping on cold ground..



Think you have cleverly captured a lot of the finer details of the fossickers lifestyle in this poem

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Re: The Sound of Gold

Post by worddancer » Tue Feb 14, 2012 10:10 pm

Thanks Maureen, :lol: :lol: :lol: I'm glad you got a laugh out of this. I purposely used those words because, no matter how hot it was during the day, whenever we camped out in the bush, I always felt I had become part of the solid cold ground, especially extricating my body out of my sleeping bag! As a Guide Leader we were thankfully ALWAYS first up, so there was no-one to see the am antics!! :lol: :lol: :lol: :roll:

I'll consider a different description, (With limbs stiff and cold as the ground)

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Re: The Sound of Gold

Post by Rimeriter » Wed Feb 15, 2012 4:02 pm

Nice to say - "G'day"

Thanks for these words - It's never to late; just do it

A most enjoyable tale is told
about the seeking of real gold.

Jim.

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Re: The Sound of Gold

Post by Bob Pacey » Wed Feb 15, 2012 4:09 pm

Well done Eliza, good to see you back on board, I rather liked the (As he extracts his bones from the ground.)

Gives just the impression that you have explained and I envisaged the prospector as part of the earth in which he seeks his fortune.


Cheers Bob.
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Re: The Sound of Gold

Post by worddancer » Wed Feb 15, 2012 5:16 pm

G'day to you too Rimeriter,
A real pleasure to have the chance to entertain you with this dance.




Hi Bob, I thought it about time I had my fix, couldn't abide the withdrawal symptoms any longer!

I was surprised when Maureen pointed out the hilarity within my words; couldn't stop giggling.
Having never met Terry, I now have this picture of a tall, skinny long-boned Zombie hunched over his computer! :lol:

But yes, you got the meaning I tried to imbue, thanks.

cheers to you Eliza
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Re: The Sound of Gold

Post by Terry » Thu Feb 16, 2012 10:54 am

Hi Eliza,
Glad to see you having a go, also pleased to see you using your own style, because I reckon that's what poetry is all about.

In time I'm sure you will refine things a bit, but I hope you persevere with your own style.

It's pleasing to think that in some way I might have helped to inspire you to write your poem and thank you for your kind remarks about my own efforts.

As for me you had the tall part right but after a few months being idle and doing very little, I not to sure about the slim bit at the moment, but a few months up the bush will fix that - I hope.

Cheers Terry

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Re: The Sound of Gold

Post by worddancer » Thu Feb 16, 2012 1:08 pm

Hi Terry, Nice that you could look in, thank you for your welcomed comments.

I'm sure with guidance my offerings will improve.

Happy travels, mate,

Eliza
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