HOMEWORK 23/4/12

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HOMEWORK 23/4/12

Post by mummsie » Thu Apr 19, 2012 2:24 pm

The first couple of times I recited in front of an audience were terrifying, and many times I questioned why I was doing it. These days I feel a little more comfortable, though I doubt I'll ever be free of nerves, but loving what your doing makes a big difference.

WHEN I GET ON THE STAGE TO RECITE

"What are you doing"? I ask myself quietly,
as I contemplate what lies ahead.
"Nobody is making you do this,
so why put yourself through this dread"?

My hands are all sweaty and shaking,
my legs are like jelly_it's true.
My heart skips a beat "did they call me?
hold on while I run to the loo".

"Just remember to mention the author,
make sure of your diction and flow.
"Next contestant" I hear a voice calling,
now take a deep breath and lets go".

After naming the poem I'm reciting,
I'm off in a place that feels right.
I'm lost in the words I'm reciting,
When I get on the stage to recite.
Last edited by mummsie on Thu Apr 19, 2012 5:43 pm, edited 1 time in total.
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Re: HOMEWORK 23/4/12

Post by Wendy Seddon » Thu Apr 19, 2012 3:29 pm

Good one mummsie,
It's just before my name is called that I
feel a call to the loo too!!!
Totally relate.
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Re: HOMEWORK 23/4/12

Post by Neville Briggs » Thu Apr 19, 2012 5:29 pm

Good on ya Sue.

Sorry to be a pain, but since this is a workshop ;) line 11 sounds to me to have 4 stresses. Since the other lines have three stresses each, that sounds like a mistake.
Line 1 seems to have 4 stresses but to my ear that doesn't seem to be a problem.

I believe you :) I have seen you recite and you are very very focussed. :P better than me, I always come last in the performance. :roll:
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Re: HOMEWORK 23/4/12

Post by mummsie » Thu Apr 19, 2012 5:49 pm

Thanks Wen and Neville. Right again Neville. :oops: Nothing gets past our Neville ;) ;) I have made the necessary changes. Thanks for pointing that out Neville, as you say, it's a writing workshop and we should aim to get it right.

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Re: HOMEWORK 23/4/12

Post by Wendy Seddon » Fri Apr 20, 2012 9:02 am

....so that makes it a right-ing workshop!
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Re: HOMEWORK 23/4/12

Post by Neville Briggs » Fri Apr 20, 2012 10:58 am

Behave Wendy, do you want to join the crowd in the naughty corner. :lol:
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Re: HOMEWORK 23/4/12

Post by Wendy Seddon » Fri Apr 20, 2012 11:07 am

Well Nev, it does get lonely up here in my ivory tower!
Anyway, Sue started it!
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Re: HOMEWORK 23/4/12

Post by mummsie » Fri Apr 20, 2012 11:43 am

So does that mean that even when we're right we're wrong Wen? :lol: :lol:
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Re: HOMEWORK 23/4/12

Post by Wendy Seddon » Fri Apr 20, 2012 11:58 am

Are you a secret solicitor Sue? Twisting words?
You'd make a good poet.
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