Homework 2/9/2013 No one is there

All Registered Forum Users can participate in the writing exercises for the current fortnight.
Users can also participate in comment and constructive feedback in this Workshop.

Moderator: Shelley Hansen

Post Reply
Heather

Re: Homework 2/9/2013 No one is there

Post by Heather » Tue Aug 20, 2013 11:12 am

Conquering fears. New beginnings.... :)

Heather :)
Top
User avatar
Maureen K Clifford
Posts: 8153
Joined: Tue Nov 09, 2010 10:31 am
Location: Ipswich - Paul Pisasale country and home of the Ipswich Poetry Feast
Contact:
Contact Maureen K Clifford

Re: Homework 2/9/2013 No one is there

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Tue Aug 20, 2013 12:09 pm

That is a great poem Marty and sadly so true - we can never go back - only forge new paths forward. Old loves, old memories and old places though are always held in our hearts. Good writing IMO

Cheers

Maureen
Check out The Scribbly Bark Poets blog site here -
http://scribblybarkpoetry.blogspot.com.au/


I may not always succeed in making a difference, but I will go to my grave knowing I at least tried.
Top
Neville Briggs
Posts: 6946
Joined: Sun Oct 31, 2010 12:08 pm
Location: Here

Re: Homework 2/9/2013 No one is there

Post by Neville Briggs » Wed Aug 21, 2013 2:37 pm

I think this one is going well Marty. I think it is better than the other one about memories. The sentences here are more direct ( subject-verb-object ) and I think that makes more impact in our poetry. Well that's what I am trying to learn. A long way to go yet. ;)
Neville
" Prose is description, poetry is presence " Les Murray.
Top
User avatar
jakkimay
Posts: 59
Joined: Fri Nov 05, 2010 7:50 am

Re: Homework 2/9/2013 No one is there

Post by jakkimay » Tue Sep 10, 2013 9:03 am

Wow! Loved it! Brought back memories for me.
'Friendship is love without His wings!'
Top
User avatar
Robyn
Posts: 542
Joined: Sat Nov 19, 2011 11:21 pm
Location: Binalong NSW

Re: Homework 2/9/2013 No one is there

Post by Robyn » Thu Sep 12, 2013 9:43 pm

Good poem Marty, and glad you had a good visit home.
Robyn Sykes, the Binalong Bard.
Top
User avatar
Maureen K Clifford
Posts: 8153
Joined: Tue Nov 09, 2010 10:31 am
Location: Ipswich - Paul Pisasale country and home of the Ipswich Poetry Feast
Contact:
Contact Maureen K Clifford

Re: Homework 2/9/2013 No one is there

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Fri Sep 13, 2013 2:05 pm

Wooo Hoooo Jakki has a piccie :lol: :lol: :lol:
Check out The Scribbly Bark Poets blog site here -
http://scribblybarkpoetry.blogspot.com.au/


I may not always succeed in making a difference, but I will go to my grave knowing I at least tried.
Top
Post Reply

Return to “Writing Workshop”