Footprints

[william williams]

an analytical mind I have not got metre etc is not my forte and this is but my opinion. If I enjoy it then I enjoy it and this I enjoy what the heck
I like it Heather it brings back memories



bill the old battler

[Heather]

Thank you Bill, happy memories I hope. I appreciate you commenting.

Heather

[Neville Briggs]

For Documentaries perhaps??

No, no Glenny I am sure he meant " show, don't tell "

[Glenny Palmer]

Oh. Like when we were at Kindy? I'm being mischievous Neville. It's Monday. (and if I don't stop hijacking threads I'll get a purple eye.... )

[alongtimegone]

I like it because it's quite beautiful ... the writing, the sentiment, the imagery ...
Wazza

[Heather]

Thank you Wazza. It's a poem of love - of a daughter for her father and of a grand daughter for her grandmother. I wish my grandmother was here to see her poem.


I was beginning to think it was a documentary.

[Terry]

Hi Heather,
For some reason I thought I'd already commented on this but see I haven't

A really well written poem that will probably bring back faded memories for most of us.

Great last stanza.

Terry

[Robyn]

I like it Heather, because you paint the picture so well. I particularly like

the constant slap of choppy waves
that splashed against the quay;

and

the sand that squeaked between her toes

,
probably because they use sound and not just sight to show what's happening.

[Heather]

Thanks Terry. You probably have commented - just not here The last line is my favourite. I love the picture of the wet footprints on the sand, filling up with foamy waves and then the water retreating and taking the footprints with it. I think it's something we have all witnessed and been mesmerised by.

Thankyou Robyn. When I write I deliberately try to think of all the things that would appeal to the senses -sight, sound, smell, touch because i think that if you can get that then you are there. Sound in particular is important. Memories are often triggered by sound.

[Glenny Palmer]

When I write I deliberately try to think of all the things that would appeal to the senses -sight, sound, smell, touch

That's a very important observation Heather, & Robyn. Goodonyou for sharing it. (I love the last line too.) xx