Homework 30.6

[Neville Briggs]

Summer wind blows hot stuff
big red trucks spread cool water -
safety first for bush homes



p.s. I know, Maureen, not quite correct syllable count.

[Maureen K Clifford]

Close though Neville - it's still a good effort and great to see you having a go as well. You could try -

keeping bush homes safe
big red trucks spread cool water-
summer winds blow hot

Hope you like the photo - it's from an 'online mate' of mine from the old ABC Pool days Ross Beckley - he is a firie and does some great photographic work as well - check these out from his 'Rust in Peace' series- https://www.flickr.com/photos/rustie/se ... 166895830/

[Neville Briggs]

Thanks Maureen. Great photo.

I did it that way because I understood that the Haiku first line should indicate the season.

Anyway for our purposes, it's an exercise in economy of words and syllable count, both lessons to be learnt for bush poetry, don't you reckon.

[Maureen K Clifford]

Traditional Haiku had as a 'given' the use of a seasonal word aka 'kigo' along with a 'caesura' or a break, often indicated by a punctuation mark,(! - , ) to contrast and compare two events, images, or situations . Not sure that the seasonal reference had to be in the first line though but it did have to be there. But the modified English style of Haiku does not have such strict rules and indeed many don't even have a seasonal reference at all. It's more about the challenge of capturing the picture and the mood with the paucity of words allowed - every word has to 'punch above its weight' as it were to deliver the message. So indeed - the less is more concept Neville.

[Heather]

? = Question mark Marty....