The Music of the River's Flow

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The Music of the River's Flow

Post by alongtimegone » Sun Dec 07, 2014 9:27 am

A very enjoyable challenge Maureen.
Wazza


A symphony I knew so well
yet held me still within its spell.
From tide to tide now fast now slow;
the music of the river’s flow

The ferry man so skilfully
did berth a mere four bars from me,
arpeggios from long ago.
The music of the river’s flow

The concertgoers disembarked
as wave tops struck the accent mark.
With pontoons resonating low
the music of the river’s flow

I felt and heard, my senses sharp
the overtones of nature’s harp.
Wild waters dancing to and fro.
The music of the river’s flow

A symphony I knew so well
The music of the river’s flow.
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Re: The Music of the River's Flow

Post by David Campbell » Sun Dec 07, 2014 9:35 am

A very apt metaphor, Warren...nicely done!

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Re: The Music of the River's Flow

Post by alongtimegone » Sun Dec 07, 2014 9:37 am

Thank you David.

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Re: The Music of the River's Flow

Post by Heather » Sun Dec 07, 2014 9:41 am

Flows along nicely Warren. I enjoyed it.

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Re: The Music of the River's Flow

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Sun Dec 07, 2014 10:15 am

That is nicely done Wazza - going to share that over to our FB page mate - you met the challenge well - thanks for having a go at it :D
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Re: The Music of the River's Flow

Post by alongtimegone » Sun Dec 07, 2014 11:07 am

Thanks Heather.

Thank you Maureen ... I have just edited it. Capitals were starting every line ... not good.
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Re: The Music of the River's Flow

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Sun Dec 07, 2014 3:57 pm

I hate that I confess but so many poets still do it that way - freedom of choice though.
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Re: The Music of the River's Flow

Post by Neville Briggs » Sun Dec 07, 2014 5:44 pm

There is no rule that says capitals can't be used for each line. It serves to mark the formal structure; that's mainly it I think. A bit like how some artists do drawings and leave in place construction lines that mark their setting out of shapes and main angles, other artists erase those lines to " finish " the drawing. Or like those mechanical things made of clear plastic so that you can see the inner working.

A few formalist modern poets capitalise lines, so it is acceptable in contemporary use.
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Re: The Music of the River's Flow

Post by warooa » Sun Dec 07, 2014 6:07 pm

Agree rules are there to break.

Always ;) Nev

But that, Mr longtimegone Cox, is remarkably well put.

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Re: The Music of the River's Flow

Post by Neville Briggs » Sun Dec 07, 2014 6:40 pm

I said there is no rule involved here , Marty . ;) :)


Sorry Wazza, Good poem. :)
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