Homework WE 5/10/15 - The Red Dirt Road to Nowhere

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Homework WE 5/10/15 - The Red Dirt Road to Nowhere

Post by Shelley Hansen » Tue Sep 22, 2015 5:29 pm

The Red Dirt Road to Nowhere
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“A red dirt road to Nowhere!” said the people from the town.
She headed there on horseback, for they’d radioed her down
to see the youngest baby, struck with measles, very ill
at Cootamundra Station out behind Gold Digger’s Hill.

He met her at the ridge, the old black tracker, grave and wise.
She knew the case was desperate, for worry framed his eyes.
He said, “The Missus waiting for you, Missy – ride this way –
there’s crying at the Station. Baby – she no good today.”

She rode along in silence, safe within his guiding wake.
He led her with conviction, knowing just which path to take.
He said, “My people, Missy, they use healing magic stones
when someone sick or wounded gets the fever in the bones.”

“It comes from ancient wisdom and the message of the land,
but this no good for Baby. White men – they don’t understand.
You young to be a healer.” She could tell this was a test,
but said, “Don’t worry Billy – for I’m here to do my best.”

They passed the long night sleepless, by the light of kero lamp -
the baby fought the fever, though her burning brow was damp.
The morning sun brought light at last, and finally, relief –
for nursing care had saved the child, and hope sprang out of grief.

They rode back down the gully, the old tracker and the nurse.
He treated her with new respect. For better or for worse
she felt the bond between them, though their lives lay far apart –
but culture and tradition are transcended by the heart.

When duty calls her she’ll obey and ride the lonely trail
to ease the pain of suffering – and sometimes, she will fail.
But she’ll remember Nowhere till her days approach their end –
for Nowhere’s close to Somewhere when you’ve made a lasting friend.
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Re: Homework WE 5/10/15 - The Red Dirt Road to Nowhere

Post by David Campbell » Tue Sep 22, 2015 7:15 pm

Great work, Shelley, especially the way you've incorporated "nowhere's close to somewhere". That (for me, anyway) was the tricky part of this exercise!

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Re: Homework WE 5/10/15 - The Red Dirt Road to Nowhere

Post by Shelley Hansen » Tue Sep 22, 2015 9:03 pm

Thank you so much David - yes, that was the tricky phrase for me too. You'll notice I did change the original prompt slightly - from "nowhere is close" to "nowhere's close". I couldn't get the original words to fit my rhythm with the right syllable stress.

I really do love the homework exercises - prompts work for me as a great brain challenge (as opposed to simply being given a subject). Sometimes while I'm "in the groove" with homework, it triggers more ideas and more writing.

So to you Maureen ... please keep those prompts coming! They are great for my creative juices :D

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Re: Homework WE 5/10/15 - The Red Dirt Road to Nowhere

Post by mummsie » Tue Sep 22, 2015 9:50 pm

Weĺl done Shelley. I was so caught up in the story line I forgot all about the prompts. Very clever.

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Re: Homework WE 5/10/15 - The Red Dirt Road to Nowhere

Post by Shelley Hansen » Tue Sep 22, 2015 10:12 pm

Thank you so much Sue - that is high praise indeed!
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Re: Homework WE 5/10/15 - The Red Dirt Road to Nowhere

Post by Catherine Lee » Wed Sep 23, 2015 6:21 pm

Brilliant Shelley - and a wonderful story, as Sue said. You get caught up in it and the way it ends is perfect. Really enjoyed this x

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Re: Homework WE 5/10/15 - The Red Dirt Road to Nowhere

Post by Shelley Hansen » Wed Sep 23, 2015 7:29 pm

Thank you Catherine - really appreciate your comments.
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Re: Homework WE 5/10/15 - The Red Dirt Road to Nowhere

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Sun Sep 27, 2015 11:13 pm

Thank you Shelley - with a little help from some of my 'friends' I hope to be able to do just that :lol: This is a beaut poem really paints the picture for the reader. And by the way altering the prompts a little to fit the poem or metre of whatever is fine, they're not set in concrete.
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Re: Homework WE 5/10/15 - The Red Dirt Road to Nowhere

Post by Bob Pacey » Mon Sep 28, 2015 7:44 am

Now ya bloody tell us Mausie ? thanks heaps.


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Re: Homework WE 5/10/15 - The Red Dirt Road to Nowhere

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Mon Sep 28, 2015 12:48 pm

I've said it before Robere - were you not paying attention? :lol: :roll:
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