Homework 19/10/15

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Wendy Seddon
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Homework 19/10/15

Post by Wendy Seddon » Tue Oct 13, 2015 3:11 pm

Posting this poem with the assurance that I am not feeling like this!!! Honestly, I'm fine :D

When all is dark, the household sleeps but I lie wide awake
with no reprieve from racing thoughts and all my old joints ache,
I listen to the creeks and groans from age old walls and doors
absorbed in contemplation of depression and it’s cause.

Despondency lies heaviest upon a weary soul
when living life with gusto is a lost, aborted goal.
The black dog sings with hungry howls while supper is prepared,
its feast consists of hopes and dreams with ne’er a vision spared.

Humanity corruptible? I know that such is true,
when old friends show as counterfeit but masquerade as true.
The morning comes and brings a dose of clarity of thought
to cope with all the daily tasks, to function as I ought.
Wen de Rhymewriter There is nothing mundane about the ordinary.

Heather

Re: Homework 19/10/15

Post by Heather » Tue Oct 13, 2015 6:42 pm

Good one Wendy :)

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Re: Homework 19/10/15

Post by Maureen K Clifford » Tue Oct 13, 2015 9:19 pm

when old friends show as counterfeit but masquerade as true.
That is a brilliant line Wendy. Terrific use of the prompts in this piece - Well done
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Re: Homework 19/10/15

Post by Shelley Hansen » Thu Oct 29, 2015 2:58 pm

Been away for a couple of weeks and missed this one, Wendy.

Really well written - even though the subject is dark, the ending is positive. I like that.

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Re: Homework 19/10/15

Post by Catherine Lee » Thu Nov 05, 2015 2:29 pm

Me too Wendy - been off line for a while catching up on work and missed this, but it's a great poem. I agree with Maureen on that line, and also 'The black dog sings with hungry howls while supper is prepared'.

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