MY COMPETITION ENTRY

[Neville Briggs]

MY COMPETITION ENTRY

I've tried to please the judges with my rhyme,
and make a careful strict consistent metre.
It's hard to match the words for every time
that judges will be pleased to see a rhyme.
And they consider it a dreadful crime,
inserting substitutions in the metre.
I'll try to please the judges with my rhyme,
and make a careful strict consistent metre.

[Maureen K Clifford]

Think your needles stuck in the groove which ain't groovy

[Heather]

Well, Neville, I thought your rhyme was good except for the word metre. I'd try to find another word. Time, slime, mime, sublime, whine should work. Keep up the good work though, you'll get there eventually.

Heather

[Neville Briggs]

Now I'll have to go in the dunce's corner
We all have to write some junk sometimes Marty, that's part of the learning process I think.


Maureen, It's just a little exercise in writing a triolet, which is a sort of round and that form requires repeated phrases.
It's not a story , just a bit of a play on words because the verse is in strict metre and rhyme. trust me Heather

[Bob Pacey]

Whats that Neville a toilet ????

it is round on the top I know.

lost me

Bob

[Neville Briggs]

Tough audience to-night.

[Maureen K Clifford]

No not tough Neville just challenged...now that you mention it I do remember that poetry form - didn't we have a go at it some time back? hence I am now mortally embarrassed because I didn't recognize it as such. I will go sit in the naughty corner and hang my head in shame

[Heather]

Neville, I don't think I could trust anyone that hides behind a book...,mmmmm

Maureen, don't go there (the naughty corner) - you just never know who might be there...

[Bob Pacey]

Come on in my little cherub.

I've made this pad my own.

Tv, Video, Computor, Fridge and of course pictures on the wall.

Got lots of tools and stuf.

Hang on this is not a naughty corner it's a bloody shed.

Yoe beauty

[Maureen K Clifford]

Now Bob was that invitation for me??? or for young Heather???? because she is the little cherub I am merely the wistful old woman according to he who shall be nameless because both his names are the same

If you meant me (be still my heart) I have always liked sheds and Bunnings is by far my most favourite store. (Batting eyelashes)